|Reviews for A Blind Betrayal|
| Guest chapter 9 . 1/13
Now your story just got pretty bad here at chapter nine can't read past that.. Only because you made things dark for naruto's son... Btw it was a good story for the first 19 words until after everything was just.. Basic child's story telling.
| Animaman chapter 14 . 3/3/2015
Read your story and while it does have it's moments, it's amazing how Naruto hasn't brought up what happened at the hospital, as well as what was said, or have Sakura all of suddenly remember everything that happened and realizing what the look on Naruto's face meant.
| A.P.E chapter 3 . 8/6/2013
You seem to be all over the place with your grammar and dialog, granted it is your fiction. However the grammer/dialog seems rushed, tad over dramatic, just for a quick shock that's rather cheap and unsatisfying. Don't take the above as a flame as the story has great possibilities, if you allow it.
Take your time, you're the writer, you set the pace & everything that follows. I will add that a beta would help you in critiquing errors and allow for a healthy back and forth in editing.
| The-picture-and-the-doll chapter 2 . 8/7/2012
| Murai chapter 1 . 6/15/2011
This is set a few years AFTER the retrieval mission! And this fic PREDATES what is known about the Uchiha Massacre.
| Ppsh chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
Terrible. Makes no sense at all. Naruto and Sasuke are genin at the time of the retrieval mission - why the fuck would they promote EITHER to Anbu captain? Ludicrous. Not to mention that no matter how biased and idiotic Konoha are they wouldn't do shit like that. I can take some exaggeration in fic's like this, but not to this extent.
| Sephiroth owns u all chapter 1 . 7/21/2010
awesome story please continue
| Guest chapter 14 . 7/2/2010
hehehe it's jiraya isnt it 0w0
| Nakasu Malakiel chapter 14 . 6/28/2010
Greats, very good. Please update soon.
| wigglewigglewiggle chapter 2 . 6/20/2010
IT IS FUCKING WORSE GOD DAMN IT AND THE PLOT IS GONE.
| wigglewigglewiggle chapter 1 . 6/20/2010
Great story but you need to do something about the dialog. Everything else is great but the lines...need some work.
| Hinatu chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
nice work on the first chapter
| J.Ride chapter 14 . 2/14/2010
please continue i love this story.
| alexa-catta123 chapter 1 . 8/15/2009
Wow so sad. But I love the story.:D
| Mystic 6 tailed Naruto chapter 2 . 7/11/2009
SASUKE! ELDERS! *lunges at them with claws outsretched*