|Reviews for Can I Have A Kiss?|
| mina chapter 1 . 4/28/2012
it was so great!
| Demonchild10 chapter 1 . 3/21/2010
in the beginning yuki wasen't himself basically he was like kyo trying to be nice i can't read it but i want to cause yuki is my fav. character cause yuki and kyo basically the to enemy that are nothing alike like hatori is completely different than shigure
| GrahmCracka chapter 1 . 6/24/2009
i was kinda worried by how long the story is, but now i don't regret the decision to read it.
gosh i love yuki and tohru! :)
| The Sins Of Fate chapter 1 . 8/18/2008
Aww! I love this story!
| YouGotsToLoveMe chapter 1 . 8/7/2008
omg i lovedd this so good! awesome job!
peace love praise and support!
| mermaidharmony chapter 2 . 8/4/2008
luc the story!
| MysticSorceror chapter 2 . 6/28/2008
Hmm, maybe I'll check it out, thanks for telling me
| MysticSorceror chapter 1 . 6/28/2008
Things I liked:
Great characterisation on everyone
Yay! Tohru's an angel
I like the numerous ways in which you refer to Tohru
I really enjoyed the short lines mixed with the paragraphs
Cute Yukiru fluff XD and Kyoru fluff too!
Nice metaphors and imagery
I like the limitless favour thing
Why do I get the feeling that the end to this will be really sad?
I can really imagine the scene
Aww, now I want to hug Yuki-kun, or at least bandage his hand
I like that line: "I want to see Yuki in your eyes...not Akito"
Great cognitive exploration
The way you've written this helps me feel all emotions at the same time as Yuki does - the mark of a good writer
I'm surprised Tohru notices Yuki's lies
Aww! I'd be happy if Yuki gave me a real smile as well XD
Poor Machi-chan T_T
Aww, she knocked his shoes in, that's pretty cute
No! Toh-chan can't be bleeding!
Aww the end was adorable! Great work
Ways to improve:
Try not to repeat words or phrases
I'd make Aya a little more flamboyant
I loved it!
Things that I didn't like:
Why is she saying Yuki-san and not Yuki-kun? Why does she call him Sohma-san later on?
Awkward phrasing: "she eyes widened" "A gave a fake reassuring smile" "He gave her bored look" "always seems do be lying" "Instead of head towards the right, he went left" "who should saw"
| hitsuzenbutterfly chapter 2 . 6/17/2008
I just love this story! So very well-written..This is going to my favorites!
| katakuna95 chapter 2 . 5/25/2008
cool! I'll check it out!
| its not your busness chapter 1 . 2/5/2008
this was the best story ever ... it was a litel long but it was so awsome , i love yuki and i love Tohru and i more love tham as"lovers" lol XD never mind
| Sophie Ellem chapter 1 . 1/13/2008
I love this Yuki and Tohru pairing! I just started reading Fruits Basket and I fell in love with it. I don't have a problem with Kyo and Tohru, but for some reason I just like Yuki better. This is the firts Yuki and Tohru story I've read on fanfiction. Thanks for making it a great story!
| lifeworthliving.bestliveddead chapter 1 . 1/13/2008
ok... im only half way through the chapter and your writing is already getting on my nerves. DO NOT KEEP REAPEATING NAMES! Use "you, they, I" when you keep repeating names its bad grammer, and EXTREMELY anoyying... ok... back to reading...
P.S. the story is really good so far...
| shadowglove chapter 1 . 1/3/2008
Okay people, let's swoon together now...AW! I loved that! It was so cute!
| Amber chapter 1 . 12/26/2007
That was so good! i love fruits baskets and you made it even better!