|Reviews for Toward the Moon|
| joleneluvschris chapter 8 . 1/8
I just want to point out here in Washington we watch the sun set into the ocean and rise over the mountains.
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/25/2014
The way I see Bella is that she probably loved Jacob far more than Edward. However Bella was basically a coward. She was unable to live life on its own terms. she felt akward and clumsy What is with Sam politicking for Beela like a campaign manager? Bella has earned Jacobs distrust ans he has earned the packs dislike. That Sam of all people would be trying to force Jacob & Bella together is absurd. He didnt like Bella at all and saw what she did to Jake. I just cant believe Sam especially knowing what Bella is capable of, the sefishness, the way she uses people, and her sick twisted soul, is going to push Jake like this to be with Bella. That Bella would regret her choice is very believable but that any of the pack would just (except seth) would tell Jake to just forget or get over what she did to him (and them) after they risked there lives to save her from danger that DEdward caused
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/24/2014
If Bella thought she wasnt the one for Jacob what is her selfish ass doing looking for him? Because that makes all kinds of sense. As does the napping and eatind and the rest of this crap. Truly awful fic
| Guest chapter 5 . 10/21/2014
Yis fic is awful in too many ways to count
| Guest chapter 3 . 10/21/2014
Ok I was afraid this was gonna suck. and now it official sucks big time. So Jake the unbelivable masculine werewolf built like a body builder is been bitter and angry all the years Bella has been away. Gimme a fuckin break But Bella has had no consequenses from being turned except that Eddie is a bit of a pansy? This is seriously pathetic. Ae you aware how many twilight stories are out there with this EXACT premise? All of them done of the main problems with this trainwreck is this not how Jake was. He was far stronger than Bella. He liked himself wasnt like Bella who was weak and a coward unable to face life. So the characters have none of the traits they should. I thought this had possibilities but no. Very disapointing. You also have like no details, the story has no real plot, nothing to fill it out.
Sorry but this is a huge FAIL!
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/21/2014
Uh you do know that Billy Black cant walk dont you? And that Bella was never of the opinion that she wasnt the one for Jake? Besides if she thought that why go back to forks? Oh boy - This is not looking to promising. A fan of twilight doesnt make a writer. Certainly not a good one we will see.
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/21/2014
interesting premise. But not sure if care for the soda drinking, pastry eating non blood consuming vampire. Seems like a cop out. Bella it seems never has consequences for her actions. everybody else pays for them. Also this is moving a bit fast No details. hopefully Jake will not just wuss out and have had his life on hold all these years. Stories like that just suck.
| jk chapter 28 . 6/14/2014
funny way to create angst cause he sure as shit doesn't make any sense. Yes I'll leave my husband and go through my pregnancy alone, ill hurt jake for months only to surprise him with a baby and be like it was the only is total bullshit by the way. shes totally safe there and its soooo obvious sooo what edweirds hanging around big fuckin deal the wolves would catch him eventually
| Vampgirl Bitches Biteme chapter 34 . 5/30/2014
Awww! This story is so cute! I love it! Please write another like this!
| Brain in the Gutter chapter 34 . 3/20/2014
Great story! Loved it!
| lilmisadiva chapter 2 . 2/6/2014
| Moonlight Cosmic Angel chapter 34 . 12/30/2013
i love the story a bit sad that paul died protecting bella but happy that her and the baby were safe. and its sooo bad to wish your daughter to be ugly as sin lol
| Deenoh1 chapter 2 . 11/22/2013
Sooo. You made Bella a what? Halfpire? She is a vampire that can eat regular food, sleeps etc. So vampire good parts and human good parts? thats just ... dumb. Dialogs very choppy too
| Jessica chapter 34 . 9/24/2013
I know that you posted this story years ago, but I wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed reading it! Your writing is amazing. Thank you!
| April-Showers82 chapter 34 . 8/9/2013
Wow, Paul died horribly quick. Was there no way for him to defend himself? One thing you kept true, among others, is making Bella a stupid martyr. She never had enough faith in the pack, especially Jacob, to fight and defend her. She always had to go to the extreme. Why didn't the Cullen's offer help to get Edward? Why didn't Alice see Edward's decisions since distance is not a problem for her? Why did they wait a week before they called Bella to warn her of Edward's actions? Do you think that if Jacob had taken his role as Alpha that he would have been better off emotionally and mentally after Bella left? Do you think Jacob knew of his inheritence before Billy died? You matured Jacob in some ways, but left him as a sixteen year old boy in others. For instance, Jacob never had a strong belief in imprinting. This lack of faith easily brought doubts and insecurities to the mix that should have never been there. Jacob's time around the other imprinted wolves should have helped him. However, it looked like it only made things worse. Also, in all of those fifteen years Jake never learned how to control his temper? How did that make him fit as a Beta when he was pissed and drunk majority of the time, outside of being phased? Why is it that the pack including Jacob never knew that Edward was inside on multiple occasions and only left to give when they finally got to his relaved?
I am glad that you made Baby Black healthy despite the acute stress his mother was constantly in.
Overall, this was a very interesting and enjoyable story to read.