Reviews for Toward the Moon
Guest chapter 6 . 11/19/2015
And nobody is acting anything close to canon. Not a single recognizable trait...except the names
Guest chapter 5 . 11/19/2015
Bella never needed Edward to live. It was NEVER Edward she could not live without. She was a coward unable to live life on its own terms deathly frightened of abandonment. She was unable to deal with a love that meant taking chances and facing pain. Edward could give her an existance without all of that being with Jake meant a lot of what ifs. Thats what Bella wanted thats the physcology of the character. Not many people would want to be forever with a cold hearted corpse that is abusive, manipulative and decietful. That makes you feel weak, stupid and unattractive and forces you into doing things that are wrong for you. But Bella was willing to give up everything not for love but for existing and never having to fear abondonment. After that what choice did bella really leave herself but to lie to herself and make herself believe she needed the corpse to live and that she loved him when love was never the point.
Guest chapter 5 . 11/19/2015
Sam of all people would NEVER NEVER NEVER push Jake at Bella. He could not stand Bella and her sick selfish ways. Maybe (maybe) Embry or Quill might encourage things but not sam an especially not after bella has become a poseur vamp or whatever the fuck she is supposed to be.
Guest chapter 3 . 11/19/2015
Sp Jake cant get over his high school crush? After 15 years. Gimme a fucking break already
BTW Jake is essentially as immortal as a vampire so long as he continues to PHASE into his wolf form regularly. This has no bearing on whether vampires are around. Vampires merely cause the quillietes to gain the initial ability to change. Once it starts though, they can continue to change into wolves at will for as long as they want to.
Guest chapter 3 . 11/19/2015
Okaaaaaay. So Sam who did not like Bella, not even a tiny bit who saw right thru all of her bullshit now thinks she is the best thing since skippy peanut butter? And Angela?Where did you come up with this awful horrible plot?
Guest chapter 3 . 11/19/2015
THis getting worse by the chapter so anyone reading this be advised that this is not one of the better twifics
Guest chapter 2 . 11/19/2015
OOOPS looks like Billy was right on target. Bella didnt have a freaking clue as to what she was doing AND since she is going to try and suck Jake back in looks like she wasnt right about Jake either. Oh yea and she obviously has regret by the truckload. Perfect score for Billy Black. Bella? Well every word out of her mouth is a lie
Ro9shimon chapter 2 . 11/19/2015
Because Bella has it like that. Being turned only made her BETTER. It simply made the washed out mousey Bella HOT. Bella got all of the good of being a leech and none of the shit. I think you really wrote this for you. BTW is that all Bella is going to do - tell everyone they are wrong and only her creepy ass is right? She is doing that an awful lot. OH and the obvious glaring error is if Bella REALLY thought she was not the one for Jake WHY COME BACK? Move to south america or france and leave him be. Shame becoming a vamp didnt do something for her self deception and her extreme selfishness. Bella is really what matters most - to Bella. That sure hasnt changed.
Last Billy is in a wheelchair, so he shouldnt be walking anywhere. I just know I am going to regret reading this all the way through
Roshimon chapter 1 . 11/19/2015
OH brother. First chapter and this is already sucking hugely. Bella has become a vampire with NO consequences. She needs no blood, her skin doesnt sparkle, nothing. It just made her hot and pretty bitchy AND you are going to foist rgis deathg worshipping twisted thing off on Jake. Great start.
joleneluvschris chapter 8 . 1/8/2015
I just want to point out here in Washington we watch the sun set into the ocean and rise over the mountains.
Guest chapter 5 . 10/25/2014
The way I see Bella is that she probably loved Jacob far more than Edward. However Bella was basically a coward. She was unable to live life on its own terms. she felt akward and clumsy What is with Sam politicking for Beela like a campaign manager? Bella has earned Jacobs distrust ans he has earned the packs dislike. That Sam of all people would be trying to force Jacob & Bella together is absurd. He didnt like Bella at all and saw what she did to Jake. I just cant believe Sam especially knowing what Bella is capable of, the sefishness, the way she uses people, and her sick twisted soul, is going to push Jake like this to be with Bella. That Bella would regret her choice is very believable but that any of the pack would just (except seth) would tell Jake to just forget or get over what she did to him (and them) after they risked there lives to save her from danger that DEdward caused
Guest chapter 2 . 10/24/2014
If Bella thought she wasnt the one for Jacob what is her selfish ass doing looking for him? Because that makes all kinds of sense. As does the napping and eatind and the rest of this crap. Truly awful fic
Guest chapter 5 . 10/21/2014
Yis fic is awful in too many ways to count
Guest chapter 3 . 10/21/2014
Ok I was afraid this was gonna suck. and now it official sucks big time. So Jake the unbelivable masculine werewolf built like a body builder is been bitter and angry all the years Bella has been away. Gimme a fuckin break But Bella has had no consequenses from being turned except that Eddie is a bit of a pansy? This is seriously pathetic. Ae you aware how many twilight stories are out there with this EXACT premise? All of them done of the main problems with this trainwreck is this not how Jake was. He was far stronger than Bella. He liked himself wasnt like Bella who was weak and a coward unable to face life. So the characters have none of the traits they should. I thought this had possibilities but no. Very disapointing. You also have like no details, the story has no real plot, nothing to fill it out.
Sorry but this is a huge FAIL!
Guest chapter 2 . 10/21/2014
Uh you do know that Billy Black cant walk dont you? And that Bella was never of the opinion that she wasnt the one for Jake? Besides if she thought that why go back to forks? Oh boy - This is not looking to promising. A fan of twilight doesnt make a writer. Certainly not a good one we will see.
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