I laughed alot reading this chapteryou’re rather dam goid at humour

I really appreciate that your Naruto's perspective is significantly flawed, and you portray some of those consequences.

Hn

Hn

Both Ibiki and Mizuki are right, Naruto hiding his skills does way more bad than good. When on a mission it makes sense to hide his abilities, but in all of his own situations it just makes everything worse for himself.

wow I haven't read this in more than 10 years, thanks for the update. This one was one of my favorites.

Why isn't Naruto sending shadow clones out for supplies? To force the Sakura interaction?

I really don't get why Sasuke gets a first person POV ...makes no sense

It is so confusing as it just jumps from one plot to the next without finishing the chapter of the story

FUCKED DAMN AUTHOR BITCH OF SHIT !

IT'S NARUTO WHO TRAIN INO TO BREAKS THE FUCKIN BONES OF HINATASHIT AND ALL THE OTHERS FUCKIN GIRLS BITCHS ! IT'S INO WHO INSULTS HINATASHITS AND ALL THE OTHERS FUCKIN GIRLS AND IT'S INO WHO NARUTO KISS ONLY !

NOT HINATASHIT !

IT'S ONLY NARUINO !

Very good story. Very good writing. Very interesting writer's notes. And, in general... very.

The only thing that I'll disagree on with you is the first person perspective you decided to adopt in certain scenes. To be clear: any lesser writer would have made it so jarring that it would not work. You do make it work, but it is kind of borderline. As for the reasoning you have given for using it — it is understandable, but I believe you could have presented the 'silent type' pov with no dialogue just fine in third person just fine. After all, there is no rule forbidding you to depict character thoughts in third person.

Other than this small issue, it is phenomenal story. Definitely not a 'run of the mill' fic that one usually finds on this site.

Yeah, foreshadowing the betrayal doesn't mean much when you're that heavy-handed with the idiot ball.

Damn I absolutely loved this story

You lost me on this chapter, you had wonderful pacing, tense moment and then this utter mess. I applaud you for trying to change the style of writing but you failed miserably. I was confused when I read this chapter and thought I was reading another fanfic, too many new elements. Sometimes trying to push the limits of your writing and being clever end up this pieces. I'll continue on reading, hopefully this is a great learning point for you.