|Reviews for Turn Me Loose: A Harry Potter Adventure|
| jada951 chapter 16 . 8/19/2013
a real labor of love, efffort, sweat and determination.
thanks for sharing it.
| Fullmetal11791 chapter 15 . 8/14/2013
Just refinished reading bungle and this. Seriously love both of these stories. The first few chapters of bungle are a bit awkward to read due to you trying out the style, but you quickly picked it up and it reads fantastically. More authors should try out first person.
Anyway, I love your OC's. Each of them had their own personalities, and the team you put together in Bungle was fantastic. Can't say enough about how awesome each of your OC's were.
As far as plot goes, it almost feels like this and bungle were one big story, instead of a story and a sequel. It flows really well. Thought that the whole Baba Yaga plotline was pretty cool. I would be willing to guess that you got no small amount of grief over listing this and bungle as Harry/Luna, and then proceeded to have Harry sleep with everyone becides Luna, but I can honestly say I believe you made the best choice. No way in Hell did Harry need or want a serious relationship during the plotlines of bungle, or this, and adding Luna to the mix would have made it way more complicated than it needed to be. Thought the epilogue was great (if too short!) and honestly, I think if you wanted to you have the potential to write an awesome third story in this universe. You've felt with England, Russia and South America, curse breaking in Africa could be very cool. Of course, with Kwan being dead, and only having Harry, Bill, Hack and Kreacher ok the team, you would probably have to build a new team, and making more OC's that the readers care about might be more trouble than its worth.
Anyway, while I think your Voldemort in your Harry/Susan story is much better written, I know that he wasn't the main focus in this story. Also think that this story has the best Bill Weasley, bar none. You also write the best curse/ward breaking, bar none. An impressive feat considering people have had over half a decade to copy and improve upon your methods. The idea that you can stop apparition and port keys with a minor hex and not have it cause a strain on the castor is rediculous.
I didn't notice many lose ends, but I do think that you may have forgotten about Ron. He wasn't helpful, at all, but he wasn't really causing a problem either.
Anyway, gonna go reread the lie I've lived. Probably will leave this review on an earlier chapter as I'm certain I've reviewed ch 16 before. Hope you keep writing soon!
| Fenrir666 chapter 16 . 8/13/2013
What kind of haikus did the Dementor write?
| kildar2010 chapter 16 . 8/10/2013
Wow this was an Awesome Fan Fic, i'm guessing the series has ended now but have you thought about a few one shots in this universe? Like going back to pick up Fawke's or maybe prank on Harry that involves booze, Fleur and waking up naked in bed with no idea what happend?
| First Martian chapter 16 . 8/5/2013
Amazing story, I've read this and Bungle and I'm off too read the rest!
Thanks for writing,
| animato22 chapter 16 . 7/28/2013
| Shadow Starfire chapter 16 . 7/3/2013
you need to wright another one to this series. loved the stories.
| Guest chapter 16 . 6/26/2013
Thanks for writing a great story! Keep writing awesome stories!
| LBII chapter 16 . 6/4/2013
Great work! Hack and scribe were very interesting characters. I do admit to being disappointed that you didn't come up with another troll or some other magical best named Slash to partner with Hack. Thank you for all your time, efforts and talent that shared with us.
| dangerverse chapter 16 . 5/25/2013
Amazing story, I loved it.
| SL chapter 16 . 5/23/2013
I found the second-person narrative very personal: making me feel I am in the character. I also found the reluctant Casanova, the Indiana Jones like adventure , and the witty dialog very entertaining. However, I felt the adventure in Turn Me Loose a bit repetitive, after reading Bungle in the Jungle. What's more, I am a bit ambivalent on how I feel about Luna: while I found her providing some emotional depth in "Bungle in the Jungle", in Turn Me Loose it almost feels like it is just a loose end.
All in all, it is still a fun and entertaining ride!
| xXDasXGoochXx chapter 16 . 5/21/2013
i enjoy your writing style. if you decide to begin again i will be thoroughly happy.
| R. Gray chapter 16 . 5/14/2013
Loved this and the previous one :)
Although I could have done without knowing about Hagrid's love life :P
Keep up the great storytelling
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| Goldrune09 chapter 16 . 4/5/2013
The best second person story I have ever read!