Reviews for A Father Twice Over
Christina chapter 60 . 6/27
Can u do a parenting story like LillanPaige but this time instead of just Roman being the parent this time you do Roman and the Undertaker as the parents and this time make it not realistic like LillanPaige is doing and this time Seth Rollins is the oldest then Dean Ambrose and then Sami Callihan and the youngest is Randy Orton and Randy is the most difficult one too like when Roman and the Undertaker ask him to something and not to do something but Randy always does the opposite and he doesn't like it when his fathers put him in time out and his fathers are distracted he sneaks out of time out and when Roman and the undertaker takes the boys somewhere fun Randy sneaks off to do the things that he wants to do and Randy Orton is Roman's and the undertaker's kid that Roman gives birth to and Randy stays the size of a ten years old and when his fathers won't let him use things that ten years old can't use aren't suppose to use he will do anything to get his little hands on them but when his fathers won't let him Randy starts throwing a tantrum and when they still don't give it to Randy he starts to hitting his fathers and will kick them if he really wants it bad enough and if they're holding Randy and when he is upset he will hit and kick in their arms and when Randy won't stop his tantrum one of his fathers will pick him up and sit down with him and try to talk to Randy sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't work and when it doesn't work they will take him on a walk to calm him down and when they think that Randy is fine to walk on his own Randy try's to go back to where his fathers said he can't be he looks to make to sure that his fathers aren't looking at him before he goes back to do what they told Randy not to do but they can catch him the most of the time before he can walk away but when they are home and when Randy try's to get out of the house so he can play but wants to be outside by himself but his fathers won't let him go outside by himself because he is not old enough to be by himself but doesn't stop Randy from trying but his fathers always block the door with their body or leg so he can't get outside but the one dad that Randy gets upset with is Undertaker because when he was youngerhe remembers that he went outside by himself once but doesn't remember that he had sneaked outside when Taker wasn't looking so now he gets mad when Taker tells him no. Thanks :) and great job on the story
Christina chapter 60 . 6/23
Great job on the story and can you do a parenting story like the one from LillianPaige but this time instead of just Roman being the parent this time you do Roman and The Undertaker as the parents and this time make it not realistic like LillanPaige is doing and this time Seth Rollins is the oldest then Dean Ambrose and then Sami Callihan and the youngest is Randy Orton and Randy is the most difficult one too like when Roman and The Undertaker ask him to something and not to do something but Randy always does the opposite and he doesn't like it when his fathers put him in time out and when his fathers are distracted he sneaks out of time out and when Roman and The Undertaker takes the boys somewhere fun Randy sneaks off to do the things that he wants to do and Randy Orton is Roman's and The Undertaker's kid that Roman gave birth too and Randy stays the size of a six years old and when his fathers won't let him use things that six years old aren't suppose to use he will do anything to get his little hands on them but when his fathers won't let him Randy starts throwing a tantrum and when they still don't give it to Randy he starts to hitting his fathers and will kick them if he really wants it bad enough and if they're holding Randy and when he is upset he will hit and kick in their arms and when Randy won't stop his tantrum one of his fathers will picks him up and sit down with him and try to talk to Randy sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't work and when it doesn't work they will take him on a walk to calm him down and when they think that Randy is fine to walk on his own Randy try's to go back to where his fathers said he can't be he looks to make to sure that his fathers aren't looking at him before he goes back to do what they told Randy not to do but they can catch him the most of the time before he can walk away from them but when they are home and when Randy try's to get out of the house so he can play but wants to be outside by himself but when his fathers won't let him go outside by himself because he is not old enough to be by himself but doesn't stop Randy from trying but his fathers always block the door with their body or leg so he can't get outside but the one dad that Randy gets upset with the most is Undertaker because when he was younger he remembers that he went outside by himself once but doesn't remember that he had sneaked outside when Taker wasn't looking so now he gets mad when Taker tells him no. Thanks :)
Angela chapter 58 . 12/5/2014
Love the idea of this story. Great concept, pretty good writing.

Only problem is that sometimes, like the beginning of this chapter, you contradict yourself. Specifically, in this chapter, you stated that it was supposed to be Kendall vs Trish but Trish is replaced by Chyna due to being pregnant.

Then, there's a conversation between Trish and Kendall talking about their match tonight. Followed by the match between Kendall and Chyna.

I assume that it is a simple error, due to changing your mind after partially writing it and missing that small conversation when editing.

Just wanted you to know, so it can be edited out or corrected if you choose to do so.

Otherwise, keep up the good work. Just found the story and am reading it all the way through in one sitting. Almost done and really enjoying it.
Guest chapter 60 . 2/3/2014
Please please please update another chapter
Guest chapter 60 . 1/26/2014
Are you going to update a new chapter again?
Sliver of Melody chapter 60 . 1/5/2013
This was so amazing! I loved it!
BubblyShell22 chapter 8 . 4/7/2012
Awww, I love Kendall and Jeff spending time together. They both are just so cool. But Jeff better watch out 'cause Cena's on the war path. No one messes with his daughter's hair. Good job.

The Bubbly One,

Shell
BubblyShell22 chapter 7 . 4/7/2012
Oh man, that was hilarious. Leave it to Randy and Kendall to make things interesting during a trip. Good job on this.

The Bubbly One,

Shell
BubblyShell22 chapter 6 . 4/7/2012
That was so freaking awesome. I love how you write the wrestling scenes. You make them seem more realistic. It's kind of ironic that in this story The Rock and Cena are friends when they were just enemies at Wrestlemania. I liked it though. It was nice.

The Bubbly One,

Shell
BubblyShell22 chapter 5 . 4/7/2012
Awww, that was a cute little chapter. I love the bond between John and Kendall, and I love the fact that John always looks out for her. That's just so cool. Nicely done on this.

The Bubbly One,

Shell
BubblyShell22 chapter 4 . 4/7/2012
Oooh, I like where this is going. Stupid Melina, Nitro, and Edge. They should know better than to mess with The Champ's daughter. Nicely done on this. I'm off to read more.

The Bubbly One,

Shell
BubblyShell22 chapter 3 . 4/7/2012
Ah, I love the way Kendall's mind works. She's just such a prankster. Yeah, I never liked Jillian or Candice either. They were just worthless, but at least they aren't on anymore. Good job on this.

The Bubbly One,

Shell
BubblyShell22 chapter 2 . 4/7/2012
Oh, man, that's hilarious. I can see Kendall doing that, too. I really like Kendall and Braedyn a lot. They're awesome characters. Nicely done on this.

The Bubbly One,

Shell
therealchamps chapter 37 . 4/1/2012
Nice interview on Conan.
therealchamps chapter 36 . 3/31/2012
Nice kiss betweeb them. Glad you said Jeff's age. Cause i was so lost.
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