that was good keep the chapters coming

that was good keep the chapters coming

that was good keep the chapters coming

that was good keep the chapters coming

that was good keep the chapters coming

that was good keep the chapters coming

My review accidentally hit the go button, and since you can't edit reviews... anyway, I love that she is allowed to function as a ninja. But I also hate it... I'm so confused.

I'm not sure of I hate to love this or love to hate it. I hate how the whole blind thing was taken care of in a time skip, but that's

Why would she need to keep here eyelids open? I REALLY don't think that's how it works...

...How does a toaster wear a vest?

Dude loved the story. Normally I hate endings but you brought this one to a nice resolution didn't leave anything hanging no major plot holes. So all I have to say is great job.

Aah.

Good ending.

No I didnt like it.

Your concept is sound and I do think it could've turned out great, not amazing, but certainly great.

Sadly you cant really put what you want down on paper, i can see what you want to write and do in this chapter, but it all just feels so lifeless, dull, like a book report?

And that is overlooking the obvious forced dramas, and things that dosnt make any sense, however the things that dosnt make any sense I can personally overlook seeing as this was written so very long ago.

Good luck in future!

stacking the deck in the MC's favor... bad storytelling.

Wow, this book, and it is a book, is incredible. Not only did it keep my attention fully, but it fascinated and surprised me at every turn. It is spectacularly well written and very articulate. Thanks to the author for the time and energy spent to write this, never stop.