|Reviews for Plasmius|
| Garnet Sky chapter 1 . 7/31/2009
And Green Bay will sell the Packers before that happens. Excellent story.
| Devianta chapter 1 . 9/10/2007
Hm... Not bad. It definitely sounds like Vlad.
I do have a complaint though: your grammer. You have a tendency to use run-on sentences, cut off sentences before they should or cut them too late. For example, "I got out of bed, I tried to think of what could happen to me but only one thing filled my mind..." This is one huge run-on sentence. You shouldn't use commas so much. You should break these sentences down. It should read, "I got out of bed. I tried to think of what could have happened to me, but only one thing filled my mind." See? Isn't that better?
Anyway, other than the massive amount of run-ons, you did a good job! This was very in-character and very well-written! So good job and keep writing!
| Jessica01 chapter 1 . 9/10/2007
Vlad is one of my favorite DP characters.
| PunkMichPhantom chapter 1 . 9/10/2007
Wow... this... was... AWESOME! I think that's probably what was going on in that brain of his! lol. Great job!
| Shiva the Sarcastic chapter 1 . 9/9/2007
Would that geek up in Redmond, Washington be Bill Gates? Anyway, good oneshot. I like your writing style.
| SamZ chapter 1 . 9/9/2007
Oh, so thats how that accident ruined his life...i always wondered that.