|Reviews for Mai|
| Guest chapter 13 . 1/23
One of my fav stories I wish it was still going amazing plot I love it
| Mytholigy 1 chapter 13 . 12/4/2013
I loved your story plot it was amazing.
| TnnSTyAchSTheDoctor chapter 13 . 11/28/2013
Please continue this. It has been an incredible read so far.
| Mistress Saturn1 chapter 13 . 7/30/2013
great story, I wanted to know if this has been abandoned?
| ten195 chapter 13 . 1/2/2013
kml this story is really good! please continue! and keep going! i love the way you portrayed mai and kuro its very cute
| Sukai Soyokaze chapter 13 . 5/2/2012
Please please please post the next chapter! you got me hanging off the edge of my seat! I especially want to see Naruto and Hinata make up again. Maybe with hugs, kisses, (perverted giggle) other things...
It'll also be hilarious when everyone finds out that Hinata and Naruto are dating (after they make up of course).
| yaoilover4 chapter 13 . 12/26/2011
Can you up date some time soon? please,please, please, please, pleeeeaseeee?
I'm putting you on Alert!
| Rightous Man chapter 1 . 12/8/2011
What really... stops me from reading any further than this chapter is that naruto can talk to his demon and they are on a friendly to semi friendly basis. I understand its fanfiction but for me that's a deal breaker. Naruto... probably doesn't want to talk to his demon even if he could. As even though all that's inside him is the 'good' of the 9tails its still pretty fucking evil. If he did talk to him the demon would most certainly be trying to brainwash him into a killer or remove the seal. Anyway i think that your premise for your story is solid, he finds a young girl in a similar situation to his own childhood and wants to see if he cant make her life better than his was / is. Its just the additional part of the chatting and willful sharing of power and knowledge between naruto and the demon i find utterly distasteful. Good luck.
| icecatfire chapter 13 . 11/15/2011
please continue and please tell me naruto and hinata will make up soon.
| Mika the Dark princess chapter 13 . 11/14/2011
| Garra'sTsuki chapter 13 . 5/20/2011
lol wicked! hope Piro gets better
| cratbro chapter 13 . 4/3/2011
This has been a wonderful story to read so far. The one thing that bothers me, though, is that Mai seems to have adjusted far too quickly.
Update soon, please! :)
| Koizumi Romi chapter 13 . 3/31/2011
Hellooooooooo Morning! I see you haven't updated since '09. This makes Voice Number Seven mad. (She's homocidal, but I didn't tell you that.) Pleeaaaassssee update! I can't stand having her rave in my head about taking your blood...
| Immortal Sailor Cosmos chapter 13 . 3/21/2011
This is possibly one of the awesomest "Naruto get a kid" stories I have ever read! (he should get a two-bedroom apartment soon, maybe three and just have Kuro move in)
And your OCs are very nicely written, and I love your character dynamics, and OMG! Your Naruto Rules are AMAZING! Can I borrow them? Because, they are just...just...PERFECT!
In the previous Chapter the panther is named Rin, and in this one she is named Ren. So, you should pick one and fix the other.
Will there be an update soon? It's been a year.
Immortal Sailor Cosmos
| Lalaith Quetzalli chapter 13 . 1/21/2011
I like the way you're handling the story with Naruto's generation and then also Mai's.
I think Shikamaru is an idiot; though, on the other hand, considering how he is, I do believe him capable of something as idiotic as what he did there. Though, considering the reason for the travel, I think he at least should have sent Temari a present through Hinata and Naruto.
In regards to Hinata, I have ambibalent thoughts. Most of the time I either see her as too weak to be a right match for Naruto, or someone who, like Naruto, cares so much about her loved ones that she hurts herself. It seems you've chosen the second path.
While I usually prefer NaruSaku, I have nothing really against NaruHina (except, like I said, when Hinata appears too wek to really deserve Naruto, and since this is not the case right now...). How far into Shippuden was this story made? I mean is Naruto already seen as a hero after Pain's defeat? Is Jiraiya alive? Is Asuma? What about Kurenai's baby?
There's so much I wanna know, I hope you'll explain more on where everyone is standing and not just Naruto and Hinata.
Also, I think Iruka deserves a girlfriend! Maybe Anko! (For some reason I really like that pairing).
So, when can we be expecting an update?