beautiful! what an interesting way to write, but I do like the repeating phrase and lack of dialogue here. :)

Pretty good, pretty good.

A few things I noticed:

1) Tense management? Like in the first section there's "he's ever been on" which is present tense, and the rest is basically past. No biggie though :)

2) The "had to keep her safe" thing was interesting, but really annoying (and corny, for lack of a better word)

3) Maybe one or two slight gramatical errors. Maybe.

Other that that, good job!

I'm not a sandshipper myself but I love this cute story of yours!