Reviews for Manipulated
Rika Azumi Sakura Yukihara chapter 11 . 12/17/2016
That was beautiful, I would go watch that play anytime!
Rika Azumi Sakura Yukihara chapter 3 . 12/16/2016
Ahawwaahhh, Mikan! I'm sorry, sniff, its OK, sniff, please don't cry you'll make me cry.
blackat98 chapter 11 . 2/21/2014
T_T ... WAAAAAH! it*sniff* was * sniff* so *sniff* sad! waaaaah TwT
AnimeCookieXo chapter 11 . 5/20/2013
Simply amazing..
Pallila chapter 7 . 3/1/2013
I really liked the song!
Pallila chapter 1 . 3/1/2013
aurora0914 chapter 11 . 2/1/2013
reaaallyyyyyyyyyyyy goooooooooooood
EchiZaki chapter 6 . 11/29/2012
Ohh the part i like with natsume yeah like it
EchiZaki chapter 3 . 11/29/2012
Natsume is gonna free you dont worry haha drama i like it makes me emotional great story :)))
EchiZaki chapter 2 . 11/29/2012
Ohh natsume is concerned :
Keichachu chapter 11 . 10/18/2012
I was captivated by your story. It was very simple. It was not that long, but the heaviness and turning point of the story was wonderfully written. Write some more. God bless you.. :)
Kannayiha chapter 10 . 8/27/2012
These two, are just too DAMN CUTE! in this, and I love it :3
Kannayiha chapter 4 . 8/26/2012
this story seems, almost...sadistic

Alessia Kyouya chapter 11 . 3/28/2012
this's a wonderful story w
Sam chapter 3 . 3/5/2012
Well I realize this was written a long time ago, but I still feel the need to point out my confusion with the math in this story...

- Youichi looks to be about 6

- Mikan says she hasn't seen him for 7 years

- Youichi says that their mother left them 10 years ago

So... to make this work as well as possible with the given facts...

Yuka left the family when Mikan was... well actually I haven't caught Mikan's age yet, but if she learned a lot from her mother and her mother left 10 years ago, realistically she'd have to be at *least* 15 now, but that doesn't seem to be the case.

Also the implication then is that Yuka left 3-4 years before Youichi was born, so either they are half siblings or Yuka came back on a rare occasion, and when she gave birth to Youichi just left him with them.

Not long after his birth, for him and Mikan to have been separated for something around 7 years, Mikan would have left home, making it so Youichi would actually have no personal memories of his sister, and I don't know when she would have contacted him to tell him to change his last name.

Ah well, I can get along reading the story without all of these contradictions, I'll just pretend all the numbers are different than what was written to make mathematical and logical sense.

It's a valuable thing to do though for any future stories to plan out the characters' back stories better, rather than having it negatively affect what you do write, since that aside many people are enjoying the stories themselves.

All the best!
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