Reviews for An Alternative Path |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Why is Naruto asking a complete stranger for training? Someone screaming pervert in female bath, then the name Jiraiya is shouted and the women only telling them to shut up? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Actually, Sasuke didn't do anything drastic until Cursed Seal. He's pretty normal at this time. |
![]() ![]() this was awesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() what does slash even mean? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I agree, once Kakashi gets serious, he gives it his full attention. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Who the hell stops to give explanations of their attack to the enemy during the heated battle?! Moronic anime/manga characters of course! |
![]() ![]() Why intro a new character? I mean 32 is not that old, hell Jiraiya and even Minato are older than her! |
![]() ![]() Wow you suck as a writer and as fanfict author also you have poor attitude as well |
![]() ![]() ![]() Fantastic story up to this point. Your portrayal of the Tsuchikage and her interactions with Minato are simply brilliant. Those scenes and her flashbacks in front of Naruto convey a very specific and beautiful emotion that is hard to describe, and that takes skill to do. I don't know if you will ever read this, but thank you for your work till now, and if you are willing, I look forward to any updates. I hope you are safe, healthy and happy in these troubling times. Warmly, Kit |
![]() ![]() ![]() Orochimaru is supposed to be the wise and clever one ... not kabuto... |
![]() ![]() ![]() You suck author. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know it's been ten years but could you blame me for hoping you would update again I love your story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Uuuh so... You are very good at making plots and events and everything, although you lack making an excitement for every events, you did a very good job till now. My problem with you that you don't understand your character right. From your writing, I can know that you hate Sasuke, or don't like him. He is the most ooc out of the characters. You probably see him as jealous brat who want to learn everything Naruto learns, right? Well that not true. Sasuke isn't jealous of what Naruto can do. At the Canon, Sasuke start feeling weak because of curse mark and the meeting with Itachi. He saw Naruto (who he used to see as a dead last, who can't do a normal bunshin) get stronger and is able to stop a bijuu and get Itachi attention, his mark and hatred started messing with his mind. He saw himself weak person and didn't feel like he can defet Itachi. Later he claimed that Naruto reminded him of Itachi because he was feeling like Naruto was progressing and leaving him alone, when he felt like an equal next to him. He started seeing Itachi in Naruto and it angers him. Sasuke isn't mute either, ya know. He didn't have that much of talking and when he talks, I feel like you will make him do something stupid(like when Naruto decided to tell them about the kyuubi) when he yelled at Naruto that he lied to him, I'm sorry but I had to stop reading the story here. Sasuke in canon wouldn't scream at Naruto about lying or trust any of them, because Sasuke doesn't care if Naruto lied or trusted him, he will be slightly hurt, but that would be after the wave mission. And he won't feel much too. You made Sakura say "he is your best friend right?" I was like, where? You seem to be saying that just for the sake of it. I didn't see sasuke and Naruto interact in this fic more than 5 times and it was just insults, much like the canon I agree, but they were more than that. If you don't feel like writing Sasuke then make an OC or change it to any other character. I hope you start loving and understanding you character more. put yourself in thier places. And you will get a lot of stuff I'm saying. There where alot of unrealistic situations like Naruto killing someone and be normal after that. A hug from Tsunade doesn't make it all better. Naruto isn't sasuke, he show how he feels, he allows himself to feel sadness and pain. Maybe because it was years later, that you can't go deeper into the characters and understanding them fully. You're not perfect. And you won't be able to. I actually respect how you still made sasuke decent enough and not bashing (I'm not a sasuke fan btw) and you still made the story interested enough to make me continue reading although I wasn't satisfied about alot of stuff. There is a lot of stuff I want to tell you about and help you with it, but it will be long to talk about every detail. You still did a very great job though. If you're actually reading this, I hope you don't get mad at me for that. I felt like saying something to you. I don't usually write previews because it's troublesome but I felt like you can write great things, if you put your whole heart into it, much like this story. But I honestly wish to talk to you about a lot things, I don't publish stories but I write them. If you want any help about anything please pm me. I'm not a great writer at all, but maybe a reader review can help you :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omfg |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is interesting. who could've infiltrated the exams this time. I highly doubt Orochi could get Suna to fall for the same ploy twice. and with Iwa trending on the friendlier side thanks to their godaime... Unless it was the council or Daigo who is orchestrating this co-op behind her back, I can't see who the snake pedophile would fool to get enough troops for another invasion. He did indeed fail to mark sasuke the first time when Kakashi wisely and humbly withheld his team from konoha's first chunin exams. lovely story by the way. |