|Reviews for Japan|
| Guest chapter 5 . 3/15
Heyyyy write more !
| The Ninth Layer chapter 1 . 4/29/2009
Whoever told you that you could write must have been intoxicated at the time.
Seriously, what was going through your head when you decided to post this? It’s dreadful.
Do you take some kind of sick, twisted pleasure in mangling the English language?
Please, delete this.
| The Inner Angel chapter 5 . 2/24/2008
The 1st part is great, love that you used quotations(sp?)("...")
and your grammer has improved greatly as well.
But then in the 2ad half you revert back to your original ways,*sigh* oh well great story as usual, keep trying hard.
As i'v stated befor i'm always willing to help if you wnat me to.
Can't wait to read more.
| The Inner Angel chapter 4 . 11/25/2007
Grammer, grammer, grammer!
Again i'm sorry to nagg, but charicter speaking biologue (sp?)
plz seporate the charictors. I realy feal this would help you as a writer.
Anyway great sorty line as usual.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
| The Inner Angel chapter 3 . 11/25/2007
Oh... great and we'r back to not being able to tell one charicter from the next.*sigh*
Oh well i'm loving the story great work. Plz, plz, plz work on grammer, plz.
Well as always gerat work on the stroy line. Cant wait to read the next chapeter.
| The Inner Angel chapter 2 . 11/25/2007
This chapter is so muh easier to read.
again i'm sorry to be a nagg about your gramatical errors.
not much eals to say. so i'll leave it at that.
| The Inner Angel chapter 1 . 11/25/2007
A good start.
You have a few gromatical errors.
Such as IL i'll are our. so on and so forth.
It's also a little confusing to tell when one charicter stops speeking and the other begins.
Thow over all a good beginning.
Keep trying hard._~ I look forward to reading the rest.
| jabanana chapter 4 . 11/23/2007
It's pretty cool.. just make your chapter longer!:) Keep on going on going!
| MsZ. RoCkEtTe chapter 2 . 10/15/2007
This is you going to continue?