|Reviews for a kingdom fit for God|
| Hinotori-hime chapter 1 . 1/1
I love this writing style! Please continue to post contemplative stream-of-consciousness one-shot!
| holographic chapter 1 . 10/4/2009
I can finally read more of your stories! (I actually just re-read the FE ones. orz; )
This was .. amazing. I feel like Koizumi might be under appreciated.
As usual, I adore your writing style, and personally find nothing wrong with the use of italics and parenthesis. I actually think, as odd as it sounds, my writing has taken a lot of inspiration from yours and a few other writers I've seen.
KoizumiHaruhi hadn't even occurred to me. Wow.
Mm. And, as usual, reading your stories has inspired me to continue working on some of my things. I also saw Fairy Tail & Black Cat up on the announcement thing. I'm excited 3
| xXxJazzy B. RealxXx chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
And I thought me and Mademoiselle X were the only ones who decided to lace the HaruhixItsuki pairing into fanfictions XD I'm glad I was wrong. Because this is exactly how this type of pairing in a one-shot should be - subtle underlining parts that make us fuzzy, but still in character.
| Mademoiselle X chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
It's beautiful. You've got an original style. Just wish it was more than a one-shot.
| Sol Falling chapter 1 . 1/24/2008
I thought the wording wasn't quite optimal in the first couple sentences. Then I got distracted (well, read: 'absorbed') by your 'style' so I can't say if there was anything after that.
It's an interesting story. A strong perspective. So little is known about Koizumi; this is, as I said, a strong interpretation of his character.
I'd have to say, regarding your style, regarding this story. It's very much in line with what I like. I don't like it. What I mean is that it abstracts the words, so that they are meanings whose only context is other meanings. By only using scraps of grammar, by interrupting, disrupting, it replicates thinking as a lateral process. What I don't like about it this time is that you've used it to paint a very...how shall I say it...internalized picture.
Actually, that's your other stories too. Internalized. It's powerful because you are drawn relentlessly into a single perspective. You lose sight of everything else, it's the one, it's the only. Let's just say that this time, this internalization managed to alarm me before I reached the ending.
I'm scared of this Koizumi, who feels so powerfully, who yearns so powerfully for what he cannot have, who if he was ever given the chance would never let it go. It's because he knows his place. Because he knows it, he is withholding, he can unleash, a righteousness that no one can resist. And righteousness is destructive.
I don't know. This might be a compliment. I can't critique your writing (really) because it is thought, a record of thought, a record in its true non-linear form. So the words lead the thought, and I cannot criticise the words. So then, to say, to explain that I don't like it, I can only say that your thought is wrong (not even that, 'scary'. Honestly, I don't like this and the only reason I can express is a compliment, damnit).
This is too long...wish I could blabber this much for classes...
| Koizumi Itsuki chapter 1 . 10/3/2007
There's a big shortage of Koizumi/Haruhi fics. I wish this was more than just a oneshot.
| kindersuprised chapter 1 . 9/28/2007
WIN. Trippy writing style love. I'm sorry, I'm not easy to understand am I? I really like Itsuki/Haruhi (oh so rare! Though I love Kyon/Haruhi too...) I read another of your SH fics and loved it, and just wanted to tell you that I love this one too. Abusing italics and parentheses'? Pfpth. Who cares about that? This is one of the best fics I've ever read in the TMoSH section and I will read more of your works soon.
You probably didn't really "get" me did you? Ahh, sorry.
| Free Hero chapter 1 . 9/25/2007
Oh damn... I'm depressed now. Itsuki is my favorite character, and he's one of my top... (5?) of all time... Kyouya Ohtori being first of course, cause he's awesome, and he wouldn't have it any other way... (clears throat)
But I didn't press the 'Go' button to ramble, I pressed it to review.
I love your writing style, and yeah, the brackets and italics were a bit confusing, but I got used to it. It was interesting, and I don't think I'd be reviewing if it wasn't. The story, not the brackets and italics. Though, those were interesting too.
Just in case it's a multi-fic, I'm putting this on story alert and my favs.
'Till next time,
| Haruhi-chama chapter 1 . 9/23/2007
That was marvelous! IH isn't as popular as KH or IK but certainly has more possibilities. I love the trippy writing style. It's very Melancholy appropriate.
I hope you write more IH in the future.
| Maelynne Naveen chapter 1 . 9/22/2007
wow, that was excellent - with so many Koizumi wants Kyon stories out there, I hadn't considered this side. I find it strikingly plausible - and actually it would explain quite a lot! Very nicely done indeed!
| Sailor-chan chapter 1 . 9/19/2007
Itsuki/Haruhi is an interesting couple. I love Kyon/Haruhi, but i like IH too, and this fic seems to have potential. Please keep writing, there is a real lack of HaruhixKoizumi fanfics.
| an1979 chapter 1 . 9/19/2007
I love darkfics.
And your fics are very good.
This one needed second read to gasp it completly (easy to miss something important).
Not as dark as your two previous MoHS ones - pity ;)
If I have to point something - it would be the lack of capital letters, I suppose it's your style of writing, but in this fic it looked strange sometimes.
| Arty d'Arc chapter 1 . 9/19/2007
Quite nice. The middle feels a bit like you were filling in the blanks between the beginning and the end, but I'm hard to please. :D
Feel free to write as much as you want for this series.