|Reviews for The Puppets|
| animeandvamplover chapter 4 . 12/30/2009
I love it will you please update soon?
| Thinker27 chapter 4 . 3/10/2009
this sounds really interesting
| TisonlyMeNow chapter 4 . 12/31/2008
i effing love it! update soon!
| Bumperz chapter 4 . 11/24/2007
I really like it. Hope there's more soon! :)
| Close this account now pleaz chapter 3 . 10/24/2007
Just a few things:
"He was specifically looking out for his new silver haired friend, Erik." - Did you mean Riku?
"A small pink tint appeared on Squall ivory face as Cloud took his hand." - Squall's ivory face
"Like name, age, where you're from and stuff like" - this sentence is kind of weird... maybe change it to where 'you're from and the like' and omit stuff.
"Your first task is to pick a song you can all play and perform it in front of us and a special guest, who you will meet later." - this sentence is a run on and at first I wasn't sure what you meant. Maybe if you break it up or use commas it will be less confusing.
The beginning of the chapter started out great, but near the end it kind of fizzled because of the choppiness that occured when all four of the guys talked back and forth.
I look forward to your next chapter!