Reviews for A New Avatar Arrives
Chocofreakazoid chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
your story needs work.

1)it's really, REALLY rushed

2)there can only be one Avatar at a time- it's the same person reincarnating

3)how on earth did the Gaang meet John anyway?

4)some of your sentences don't make sense

5)you have spelling/grammar errors

6)the characters are really out of character, its disgusting.

7)Toph is not Fire Nation- how would she be able to teach Earth bending if she were?

8)why would Katara be captured, then placed in a "fancy room"? it makes no sense whatsoever

9)if someone tells Azula they refuse to serve her, she wouldn't waste much time talking (much less telling them how in-shape they are!) and shoot lightning at them

10) your plot is confusing- i don't understand what you are trying to tell the reader

please take this into consideration when writing your next chapter
oreobabysunshine chapter 1 . 5/22/2008
PLease write more!