|Reviews for A New Avatar Arrives|
| Chocofreakazoid chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
your story needs work.
1)it's really, REALLY rushed
2)there can only be one Avatar at a time- it's the same person reincarnating
3)how on earth did the Gaang meet John anyway?
4)some of your sentences don't make sense
5)you have spelling/grammar errors
6)the characters are really out of character, its disgusting.
7)Toph is not Fire Nation- how would she be able to teach Earth bending if she were?
8)why would Katara be captured, then placed in a "fancy room"? it makes no sense whatsoever
9)if someone tells Azula they refuse to serve her, she wouldn't waste much time talking (much less telling them how in-shape they are!) and shoot lightning at them
10) your plot is confusing- i don't understand what you are trying to tell the reader
please take this into consideration when writing your next chapter
| oreobabysunshine chapter 1 . 5/22/2008
PLease write more!