I love it when Naruto Fanfic writers add in the “Eternally Youthful Genjutsu” of Lee and Gai. Those two, and other people’s reactions to them (especially outsiders’) are always good for a laugh... and Sasuke catching it with the Sharingan... XD
-CB

Loving what I’ll reading so far. I adore the inclusion of the ninken, and especially the little scene with Pakkun’s soft paws (little details really build).
Kudos.
-CB

fucking females, they wouldn't complain if it was a naked male. stupid hypocrites

Sooooo goooood! You did a fantastic job writing this fanfic! I can't wait to read the sequel :D

I had to stop reading numerous times during this chapter because I literally couldn't see the page through my tears T.T I even knew she would die! You did a fantastic job in depicting the utter grief felt by the characters. Great job so far! :D

Ino hitting naruto is dumb and sasuke and naruto being evenly matched in anyway makes no sense with having a different childhood and being trained by jonin sasuke shouldn't even be in the same league as naruto yet alone his rival

Maybe you should go back to grade school. You seem to have forgotten about something called a comma. Use them.

Fantastic story man.

superb!~~~~~~

Why couldn't you just make kakashi get lucky and kill orachimaru with a did have his mongekyo at this time so y not

11 chapters in and I feel the story itself is interesting and makes me want to read the rest. This is offset by the fact that the author's English could use a lot of improvement; it's obvious he/she needs a beta in the future.

Kakashi and gai are friends and have been rivals since they were genin Where do you get your information from

I've read the manga series so I mostly remember what's going next but you've set up an alternative reality so there's so much to see that's different from the connon series. I'll be looking to read part two of this.

Yeah but they didn't keep her dead.

Lol with a big grin.
So we see a bit of traction with 3 pairs of ninja.
Will Naruto ever get some baby sibs?