Reviews for Model Behaviour
Pleaseeeeee chapter 10 . 12/20/2014
Please keep writing this story it's amazing!
XxUchihasLovelessLoverxX chapter 9 . 6/23/2009
I really like this story and hope you continue it

but please tell me that your oc won't become a main character, I hate that
Mythalie169-TreeSpirit169 chapter 9 . 2/1/2009
M, i dunnoe. I like it and all... but ...meh. I guess i just don't like OC's very much. -.- yeah. I'll admit i'm a hypocrite... still. Lol. It's a very nice story...i'm just not too much for Tamsin...)
DemonicKitsune-chan chapter 10 . 1/1/2009
It makes me cry that you stopped this fic, I'm not sure if i want to read your other ones because of that...even though I know your sorry.
Moola Deena chapter 9 . 7/2/2008
Hmm. I think this is a relatively good fic, though I dislike the fact that you gave an OC (Tamsin) such an important role. *pouts* Oh well, I can't always have it my way, can I?
Syuuk chapter 3 . 5/30/2008
OMG! NEJIGAARA! love them P. And seme Naruto too. love love love. No other way to say it. love this story to death !
AnsemMesna chapter 8 . 5/30/2008
Sorry to bust your bubbles but Sasuke can NEVER be uke (unless he's with Orochimaru or his brother), for several reasons; One: there is NO uke in SASUKE and heres why: サ:SA ス:SU ケ:KE; Two: Sasuke seems to be more dominant then Naruto;
ZoeMunro chapter 10 . 5/30/2008
i really want you to carry this on, i absolutley love it
GoreFuck chapter 9 . 5/24/2008
AWESOME! really awesome...

i really cant belive that u could come up with all those perfect ideas...really...

anyways i cant wait to know what happens next! update soon

MasterTabby chapter 9 . 4/11/2008
OMG! I LOVED the "thanks to Sasori, managed to confirm that red heads really do go faster, harder and longer."! I ROTFL!

Poor 'Tachi!

Update Soon! Cannot wait for the next chappie!

Ever thought of putting some SasorixDeidara in this fic?
sahanoel chapter 9 . 4/11/2008
*claps* O: tis is awesome dude XD
Strudel Ninja chapter 9 . 3/31/2008
Sheesh, I haven't been on in awhile. Anyways, I thought I should review so you don't feel so bad about this fic. :( It's never good to lose heart for a story (I know the feeling), but you've gotta try, and the best way is to get positive and constructive reviews, right? I'm gonna be completely honest here, thinking like a reader, so try to understand my angle, okay? :)

First thing first: I've liked reading your story...up until this chapter. Why? There were things included that shouldn't have been included. More realistic way of putting it: Your tangents sometimes lose the reader amidst huge paragraphs. I understand that some authors put in OCs, and I have no problem against them if they add to the story's plot/overall mood. Tamsin may have started out important, but I had a hard time keeping track of who she was and what she was saying. Try to keep the swearing or coarse language down a little during serious moments (though, of course, you're not limited to only a few words ;D). She confused me, to say the least. The relationship between her and Itachi was odd and out of place.

Second: I felt like I was running a marathon! To be frank, it was exhausting to read. I like neat, small, easy to understand paragraphs on this website's format, so it increases legibility and makes me feel more "in to" the story. Once again, I got lost. O.o It might be MY fault for just having poor concentration skills, but I just wanted to point that out. Don't feel bad about your punctuation or anything, because I know you were without a beta. But I would suggest trying to work without one, because then YOU grow as an author. :)

Third: Relating to my first point, the amount of swearing/general useless language in here kind of turned me off. :( I really don't like swearing in my books or in real life, but I can tolerate it to an extent. I understand if a character gets angry, they will swear, or if they are being sarcastic, they will use slang words for, well, parts of the body. But I felt like you basically used these words as your basis for conversation. I really hate telling people this, but I can't ignore it. \ It's always nice to read stories that show big, complicated words or the style of the author's writing, rather than trailer-trash talk and rude characters calling each other names.

To end my rant-of-doom that probably made you feel mad/sad/depressed/angry/or downright stupid, I just want to say that I'm still reading this story no matter what. :D (I doubt I've ever written such a critical review before, ever O.o) Try not to take my words as harsh or mean, I just want the best for my fellow writers. :) Good luck!

xXxTylerxXx chapter 9 . 3/28/2008
oh! Tasmin so owned Itachi .! Tasmin rocks!
Broken Sexed Up Bloody Kitten chapter 9 . 3/27/2008
Heya! Liked it, though it's supposed to be about Sasu and Naru but... Just do the next chap about them yeah? Plz UD ASAP... Pretty Please With Sugar On Top... xD

- Tenshi no Yoko -
ColorfulNympho chapter 1 . 3/26/2008
Omg! Naruto's a smexy beast! Woo!
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