|Reviews for In Common|
| Jonia chapter 6 . 3/14
LOVED this story! Thank you!
| Moonchild 1212 chapter 6 . 4/3/2016
| Barton81 chapter 6 . 3/8/2016
thanks! good concept, good writing.
typo: ch. 6, "if I would have survived.." change to "I would not have survived without..."
| MissusGages chapter 6 . 3/5/2016
Great story! I love the concept!
| TPalesh chapter 6 . 1/26/2016
So wonderful. Thank you for this touching story!
| Guest chapter 6 . 12/2/2015
Thank you so much for writing this. I enjoyed reading it.
| wine witch chapter 6 . 10/30/2015
Nice one, thank you!
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/14/2015
I just found this and enjoyed it very much!
| Guest chapter 6 . 1/11/2015
| meg527 chapter 6 . 11/13/2014
Wonderful story. Thank you!
| Guest chapter 6 . 9/29/2014
| jensteed chapter 4 . 7/18/2014
What a beautiful chapter, and a great story :)
| centava chapter 6 . 2/19/2014
Hmmm...I hate to be overly critical since I really love your work, but this story felt very rushed and had a lot of holes. You had several plot devices there that didn't really serve any purpose beyond giving Hermione a reason to leave the wizarding world (i.e., loss of Harry and Ron, l'attraction). But you didn't explore how she had lived the last 9 years to make her be open to being with Severus. Yes, she worked and didn't have much social life, but could afford wine and a fancy apartment-so not too bad a life, right? You lightly touched on a botched suicide attempt to denote her subconscious unhappiness, but it kind of just hung there; that period in her life needs a lot more depth to make this story believable. And Severus saying they had l'attraction in common? You didn't develop that plot device enough for me to do more than scratch my head about it. I sort of felt like 'who cares?' about it, since the Amari bit was the real driver of the story.
Then the whole Amante/Amari bit-it didn't really ring true that Severus would have felt this for her since she was 11, yet hid it from her all that time, if you expect the story to follow canon until DH. It might have been more realistic of him to become aware of it either during or right before the final battle. But even then, her almost immediate willingness to go with him, not really giving it any consideration (since she turned in her 2 weeks' notice the very next day and just packed up her whole life on the premise of 'you can't choose who you love') just didn't feel legitimate. Just really rushed.
Then there's the general lack of lemony goodness-you DEFINITELY could have gone further on those bits! ;-)
Overall not a bad story by any means, but it probably could have used 4-5 more chapters to really flesh it out. Maybe I'm being influenced by the fact that I'm still fangirling on your Hermione from Snape's Oceans, but this Hermione seems flighty. I do realize you wrote these Hermiones very differently, but in this story, only the Hermione of the 5-years later section seemed likeable and actually in love with Severus.
Just my 2 cents, for what they're worth!
| Dimac99 chapter 6 . 2/12/2014
I love the idea that the Dark Arts create a physical addiction and the symbolism with the colour (change) of 11 year old Hermione's feather was a great idea.
| mysinger chapter 6 . 12/10/2013
Marvellous story! It was very well written.