|Reviews for Clash in the Land of Snow: Legacy Version!|
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/4/2015
Awesome fic but update faster
| MotherOfGrammar chapter 33 . 2/16/2015
Wow, just wow. I have to take this time to say I absolutely adore what you've done here. You've taken a concept that originated with Tellemicus Sundance, and not only have you shown a thorough understanding of his work, but you have managed to make it your own. I can't imagine all of the hard work and effort you put into crafting the fight where Team 7 faces off against fifty ninjas. That is some serious dedication and creativity to something you're not even being paid to do. May I also say I absolutely love what you've done with the characters? I know parts of them resemble the ones Sundance created, but you've managed to flesh them out in your own way so beautifully. Each of these characters has been forced to learn something about themselves. Naruto is learning not to take everything on by himself, Sasuke is learning just how much the others mean to him, and Sakura is learning she can motivate herself to be just as strong as the boys. Speaking of Sakura, you have managed to accomplish something Kishimoto unfortunately failed to do in canon, and that was to actually invest me in her character. I care about her struggles, her insecurities, and I've even found myself rooting for her here. With all due respect to Kishimoto's work, Sakura is a character he could have written better, and what you have here is exactly what I wanted to see from her but never really did. However, the characters do not just stand on their own. You have united them together as a team. They work off each other well, and have grown to care for each other like a real family. Together they are a group of powerhouses.
Also worth mentioning is the detail that went into further exploring the Snow Country. Considering the first Naruto movie is usually the only one most people can actually stand, it's nice to see it explored a little more here. From the politics, to that shifty witch, and the relationship between Doto and his brother; everything has been meticulously crafted and portrayed in such a believable fashion that it could almost be mistaken for canon.
I feel I should also address the relationship here between Sasuke and Sakura. Now, I'm not the biggest fan of this pairing (even though I wrote a fic about them. Though it was more of a parody) I find it pretty believable here. You were right to make Sakura angry with Sasuke for what he had done. That way we were able to gradually see them work towards reconciliation, providing their relationship with a lot of depth.
Now let me close this overly long review by saying I look forward to your taking over the Legacy series, and how I can't wait to see what you do there. Good luck with all of your projects!
| XaoOfTheMists chapter 29 . 12/2/2014
Was that a Gargoyles reference?
| XaoOfTheMists chapter 27 . 12/1/2014
Nice reference to Batman Beyond: Return of the Joker.
| XaoOfTheMists chapter 17 . 12/1/2014
Nice Jackie Chan Adventures reference.
| Tminor chapter 26 . 9/24/2014
Love Sakura's super saiyan rage.
Her anger is a canonical element of her drive often downplayed even in fics centered on her. 'Course haters gonna call her bitchy but that's poop logic.
As seen in her near death monologue, she hasn't been developing her sense of self properly, unlike her teammates. Her low self-esteem wasn't weeded out by ino overnight, just took the active form of seeking peer acknowledgment through blind conformity. Sheltered upbringing certainly didn't help her break out of pretentiousness and start growing up, as Sasuke and Naruto were forced to at a young age. A tree trunk of peeling ego and a hollow id as core, so to speak. All this came crushing down upon joining team 7. As her naïveté toward reality dropped, she was forced to face her lack of purpose and sense of worth. Feelings of uselessness, frustration, and all around disorientation as to how to stop becoming even more helpless. Urgency from recent events speeds up this vicious cycle of anxiety in the teen, the repressed aggression sparks her innate competitiveness and anger.
Kishimoto no doubt didn't intend this; but sakura makes for a realistic case of an bare-hand struggle for distinction in the midst of giants. It's very fitting that she snaps, delivers fatality, and survives. You arranged this battle very well imo. I'd like to think that this is the beginning of her late-blooming.
Anyway I know that I sound like a stan and I promise I'll review on other topics...it's just I'm suuuper happy to see a well written sakura that doesn't take over the stage like canon naruto. I can just feel her frustration to fucking destroy, to find but a sense of purpose and be of substance.
...also as a martial art practitioner can I just say how cool the concept of enhancing close combat with perfect chakra control and timing is! ...the optimization of muscle performance and seamless coordination ...honed to a level that enable the frail human body to dish out explosive attacks and withstand bone-shattering reaction force. (I sound like gai :') ) pinnacle combination of the knowledges of physics, fighting, and anatomy. Super risky and super cool combat medic idea.
Ahem sorry I'll stop now
Can't wait to see what you plan for team seven in the future!
| Tminor chapter 20 . 9/23/2014
First time reviewing here, after marathoning these twenty chaps since finding out about this fic.
So! Lots of things to say but first let me express how much I appreciate your execution with sasuke/sakura here
I am so moved i want to hug you. Seriously.
You don't pull punches with your recognition for sakura's place alongside the boys. She shares their hotheaded-ness, combat acuity, drive for strength. She belongs. (Fuck kishi's "dunno how to write girls","forgot about her" lolgic) Looking for this in fanfics, I constantly see authors still putting her in a special bubble among the trio's dynamics despite their pro-equality claims. That leads to my approval of your view on the three-way deadlock and realistic look on power levels. In martial arts and competitive sports, one's winning record simply is not a guarantee for future performances in all kinds of different settings.
In short, I fucking love how you let sakura join the boys' pummeling style of bonding and how you give both fights realism in its unpredictability and symbolism. Through each exchange of blows the three of them use their intrinsic violence to communicate personal grievances and find mid ground on budding trust and respect. Words don't work with them; that's team 7's signature explosiveness I think.
And! Aside from having sakura punch and get punched like an equal! I think her romantic feelings being clearly reaffirmed is a new source of strength, in a way. It's an empowering element of her character grown out of its embarrassing childishness.
I'm just happy cos people still diss her on this in fics that are otherwise cool.
Lots of other things to review about and I know the rant above isn't in your major interest. But first review I just want to express how high I am in finding all this in a super epic, action-packed fic! God bless you. Everything I love is here praise Jesus and Buddha.
| Ancestor's Dragon chapter 33 . 8/7/2014
Phew, finally closed up with that. Wasn't expecting the witch to come back into this, but it definitely went together well. Great job with this chapter, I enjoyed reading it. I look forward to reading the next.
| Zoneshifter D chapter 33 . 8/5/2014
Well, you'd be surprised to learn that I might have changed my tune from last time I reviewed. From the way Doto is going, he's a villain that believes he was some righteous justification for doing what he does aside from the megalomania. Considering I've grown to have a distaste from Kishimoto not being able to make a villain that doesn't have some reason that is sorta sympathetic at least in their minds, It kinda puts a crimp in me fulling enjoying this chapter.
The thing that did surprise me was what Koyuki's father WANTED to be brought down. Specially his motivations to do so. Although he makes an argument for bringing democracy because it would have been more just than the current system, the fact that his starting motivation was to get out of a job that he didn't want and even went ahead and willingly did things to kill his own reputation to bring about his own fall. I really hope you reveal this fact to the characters. Would be a good shock for them, even if it sours their victory.
Also, him believing that his firearms, which would have made it easier for people to kill one another would have helped the peace and replace the ninja, shows that the Daimyo of Snow was rather naive. Shinobi aren't so stupid that they won't be able to adapt to a weapon where the best strategy is to not be where it points at. Specially when said ninja tend to have super human speed and already possess area of effect illusions and attacks to deal with armed soldiers...
I can't say I'm Kosher about you trying to make Jashin into an actual existing deity. Just doesn't appeal to me as much as it apparently does to you. Stil, hope we can finally get to the endgame of this story, and that it will be satisfying.
| TimeShifter chapter 33 . 7/10/2014
You definitely succeeded. I didn't see the witch coming, I didn't predict the genjutsu on Mikata, and I was shocked that Doto still killed her. And that's not even getting into Sousetsu's plan! I'm going to need to read this a second time to absorb it all, but you obviously wrote the most compelling take on Snow Country I've ever read or heard of.
For the most part, you succeeded in making me consider Doto's point of view. Where I lost it, was when he killed Mikata despite knowing she was under a genjutsu. I get that he maybe moved past her, but he had really made it to a dark place at that point if he'd kill someone who could have been a powerful ally, and despite moving past her I find it hard to believe he'd hardened his heart that much. Then again, I'm sure everyone had a different point where they stopped accepting Doto's changes, or maybe some readers side with him to the end. You did a great job with his character!
Sousetsu, I'm not sure yet. I still can't process how crazy his plan was. We'll see on the second read if it makes more sense to me. You've made me very excited for Doto's last stand though! And I'm curious if Koyuki will have a chance to understand her uncles goal. Will she be idealistic? Realistic? So many questions remain!
Anyway, overall this three-chapter flashback was ridiculously well done, and now more than ever I can't wait for you to take on Chuuten!
| reality deviant chapter 33 . 7/4/2014
this is a special and appreciated take on the situation.
i like that doto more then the canon one.
wonder if the dark truths behind the scenes will be revealed to the 'princess' and the leaf nin
| Tellemicus Sundance chapter 33 . 7/3/2014
I think you got your points about evil across quite splendidly! I utterly loved the various revelations that took place in this chapter. In a way, Doto's transformation is kinda what I imagine Lucas was trying to portray Anakin's into Vader as being like. And I especially gawked at that big revelation with what happened to Mikata, I confess to having NOT seen that one coming!
Man, given Doto's fighting spirit as hinted at the end, I'm REALLY looking forward to seeing his last stand. It's gonna be AWESOME!
| Sage of Wind Dragons chapter 33 . 7/3/2014
Damm you did Doto DAMM proud, if you can do THIS with characters and back story and creation I wonder what you can eventually do with others... part of me just feels so BAD because no one will know really in regards to the history unless he left it to everyone... and hell the witch dying off could be all sorts of fun! but seriously that's just a big part of the biggest Tragedy of all of this... and part of me wonders on whatever afterlife certain people HAVE if that everyone that was involved would GET the full story! but seriously Koyuki I wonder if she CAN be a leader that will do justice to the mess both sides have done with all of this...
anyway great to see this wrapping up, the final stand of Doto should be all SORTS of fun, especially as hes probably going to be the most famous person of Snows history, and the good and bad of them throughout the years... yeah.
love the jokes about gunpowder, but seriously considering all the forces in the ninja world they would DIE and fail in regards to stuff, be a big technological advancement and would change some rules... but still.
loved that joke though it was fun.
| gleamfang chapter 31 . 9/27/2013
I am loving this flashback scene so much. There's so much character development and good quality story here that it could practically be a story unto itself.
I'm really happy that you took up the mantle to complete legacy of the rasengan as you seem to have similar writing styles to tellimicus and I love the cheekiness of our three favourite genins especially whenever they just drop everything and start arguing/beating the crap out of each other.
I also personally enjoy that you are using this story as an opportunity to develop Sasuke and Sakura as well as deepening their relationship to help make Sasu/Saku that much more believable so well done on that idea!
The only thing I can't say I really enjoy is a complete lack of Kakashi and how little I actually miss him in the story. It's as if the entire story could run without him! I don't know if this is a good or bad thing but it's just an observation albeit a rather confused one.
Good luck in your job and finding time to write. I eagerly await your next chapter.
| Pyrrhos chapter 32 . 9/8/2013
I love how you're making Doto a relatable person here, by showing how small misunderstandings, pressures of war and simply avoiding a confrontation about people's feelings causes him to snap when they're finally revealed.
By showing how he became the horrible, soulless bastard you've shown earlier in the story you humanize him again.