|Reviews for Kingdoms Come|
| xXxVioletSkyxXx chapter 21 . 1/22
I can't tell you how much I enjoyed this.
It's not often that one finds a Fanfiction written so beautifully they they indeed find themselves flipping through a grand storybook instead of a website on my phone. You took me with Peter and Lucy on their beautiful ship, Susan and Edmund in the household of King Lune and Prince Corin, enjoying and laughing and blinking little happy tears out of my mind so I could scroll a little faster. I found this about 2 weeks ago and have been reading one chapter at a time as if to save a sweet so the taste stays as long as possible. Ive only just recently gotten into this fandom, and I wanted to tell you that I admire you- your writing is exquisite, beautifully written and crafted, each sentence and speech written with such care. I loved your characterizations of all the characters, but most especially for Peter, Lucy, Corin and his beautiful mother whom I can't remember the name of in this instant. It was like I was sitting beside them, looking in on their lives like we were the dearest of friends. This is one of those stories you slip back into again and again, much like the Narnia books themselves.
Thank you for writing something that moved me, made me grin and wish and hope for their trials and joys, weep for their sorrows and rejoice for their triumpent return. Please keep writing, I'd read you forever.
| R-Gomeni chapter 21 . 4/28/2014
I will say that I adore this story. It took a little time to get into it, but once I did your descriptions and characterisation was so vivid, real and congruent with canon that I can't fm anything but love the story. I will say that it was wordy at times, but overall the turn of phrase was so similar (though not identical, which is not necessarily a bad thing) to C.S. Lewis' that it was still certainly worth reading. Thank you for a brilliant story :-)
| Guest chapter 2 . 3/4/2014
THANK YOU so much for making Lucy blonde! Long live Lewis' original works. :P
| Guest chapter 19 . 1/30/2014
I love this story to death! It's the most Narnian thing I've found outside the originals, not saving even the films.
I do have two questions though. And to be honest, I hadn't thought about them before now. 1, Why aren't the monarchs of these other isles angry that their subjects want to leave and move to Narnia? Surely that would create an economic hardship if they lost farmers, or a political one if they lost too many lords and ladies. It suddenly struck me as odd that all the kings are being so helpful in the interview process, which means the coming detriment of their own kingdoms.
2, And this one may help answer the previous one. Are you really intending the rulers of these lands to be rulers (kings and queens, etc.) or are they merely stewards, like they are presented in Voyage of the Dawn Treader? Because I always believed, and I think Lewis said so, that the islands were all fiefs of Narnia. In which case, the governors couldn't make a fuss about their populace moving to the mainland. But then you'd have to deal with a least some not wanting to acknowledge the rule of the Four (after years of freedom during the reign of You Know Who). Didn't Lewis write that somewhere as well? I can't remember if it was VDD, or PC, or HHB (sorry; I know that's not very helpful), but I think he wrote that it took a while for the islands to give full sway to Narnia. And one of them may have even been won in a war. Oh! Is that the route you're taking? These are independent countries and will eventually be won by Narnia? I'm not sure I'll like that - seems empire-grabbing - but I'll wait and see.
Anyway, thanks for bearing my musings.
| Guest chapter 7 . 1/29/2014
Is that a hint of Mary Poppins? :)
| Guest chapter 6 . 1/29/2014
You have the best writing! I love the understated, witty humor that would be sarcastic if it wasn't so good-hearted! You are in fair contention for being the best writer I've found on this site!
| Guest chapter 3 . 1/29/2014
Isn't their ship's name spelled without the "u"? "Splendor Hyaline," I thought it was. Other than that, remarkable job!
| Guest chapter 3 . 1/29/2014
You've captured Lewis' style amazingly! I love the tone, the vocabulary, the side notes and solemn observations. It's all wonderful!
| trustingHim17 chapter 21 . 9/16/2013
loved the story!
| trustingHim17 chapter 19 . 9/16/2013
i really wish you had not used the "b word" to describe the spaniel mother. while it is an accurate word, it is also a cuss word and "mother dog" would have sufficed. other than that, i am thoroughly enjoying your writing. your style is very similar to lewis'
| Hebi R chapter 21 . 12/22/2012
I sympathize with the dear chronicler, and am grateful for the part of the story she has shared.
| Hebi R chapter 17 . 12/22/2012
You do not like salmon? In any form? Baked, grilled, smoked, or sushi? After the anchovy paste, I am beginning to think you have something against seafood. Never mind, more for Peter and me.
By the way, I find myself quite fond of the Terebinthians, who appear to be less interested in showing off and more in love with beauty for beauty's sake, though not shrinking from ugliness. And one can always respect royals that know how to wield a broom.
I also admire any Duck that holds his own in combat.
| Firefly's Rebirth chapter 21 . 10/26/2012
Great work! (as I stated in my previous comment) Now I'm off to read this other fic you keep mentioning in your notes...lol...
| Firefly's Rebirth chapter 18 . 10/25/2012
I thought this chapter rather brilliant. The great things about letters is the fact that by the style of writing and expressing oneself, you very much get the type of person they are; How they sign off their letters, etc. It's great. I don't know if any of your other fics are a continuation of this, but I think you've done a great job here. I've been working on reading this fic all week (been super busy with school), so reading these chapters has been the bright spot at the end of my days. lol Keep up the great work!
| BlueDorid chapter 17 . 4/11/2012
You are easily one of the best writers on and this is most definitely the best Golden Age fic in this fandom. Your writing style is very reminiscent of C.S. Lewis, in fact, I like it better than his because you really develop the relationships between the Pevensies and you offer up so much more details! I always leave the Narnia books hungry for more details and this is perfect!
Your world building skills are amazing and your characterizations are spot on. I love the way they slowly grow into the leaders that they will be and I especially love your Lucy. I love all the Lucy/Peter interactions and how each of the Pevensies complement and built each other up.
This has to be my favorite chapter of them all, with the storm and Terebinthia.
I have truly enjoyed every word of this and sincerely hope you write more! Thank you so much for sharing this!