|Reviews for LOST and LOST 2|
| quoideneufj chapter 32 . 11/6/2012
"SWAN AND SIMMONS PARTNERS, AND BACK IN BUSINESS."
This was good, both parts!
| bunnysue chapter 16 . 11/5/2012
Beautiful song, beautiful story. This was my second read:)
| quoideneufj chapter 11 . 11/4/2012
This is so good.
| Moira Bianchi chapter 1 . 10/17/2012
Hello there. I read your story LOST years ago on a different site, maybe Lion and Lamb? - and loved it. Now Im adventuring mself on writing P&P fanfics and just blogged about Fifty Shades of Grey. I had to link your story cos it's my favorite of all Twilight ff I have ever read. Heres the link if youd like to check my blog. .
Tks again for this lovely ff.
| Emma.Reads chapter 32 . 9/30/2012
Hi! I've read all your story in a day, and I'm completely inlove with it, and the way u write is amazing.
I was talking with another writter and she encourage me to ask you to translate it :B
They told me that it was translated but the other author delete her profile, so I think it was a good opportunity hahaha
Anyway, if you like the idea you can send a message to me.
Thanks for reading this!
| le petit vampire chapter 1 . 7/31/2012
| ReaderFanAntic chapter 1 . 6/17/2012
Oh my gosh...I can't believe I found this story again! I read this when you had first written it and fell in love with it...sorry I never reviewed but my internet access back then was so bad that I could only view the story for a few minutes let alone have time to review..sorry about that but I thought the story was GREAT! I honestly thought I would never find it again after that but I'm so glad you left it up. I can't wait to read the sequel! GREAT WORK! I especially loved how accurate every detail was.
| Bonifashka chapter 32 . 6/17/2012
This story is great. Both of them are. I especially liked the epilogue. They suck in the most fanfics I've read (and in many actual books as well) so far but yours is spot on. :) I also like that you give the vampires purpose and careers. It's one of the greatest flaws in Meier's world. You can't live aimlessly for several hundred years, you'll kill yourself out of boredom:))
Now I want to give you several critical comments about the story if you don't mind. I am Russian and I am an English teacher to boot so I have some experience with "broken English")) The best sentence I've even seen was "At me eat dog" which was a word-to-word translation of "I have a dog". I don't think you will rewrite the story now but if you ever try writing Russian speaking English again it will sound more natural if you use these tips:
1. Russian has only 3 tense forms so those who don't speak English well enough are likely to use only simple tenses, present continuous at most. And definitely not perfect ones. Especially the constructions like "might have been". In Russian it is something like "might was" or even "could be was". In most cases present perfect will be replaced by past simple and in cases like "I've been living in Moscow" when the action (or state, whatever) hasn't ended yet it will be present for a Russian.
2. There be is a difficult case, too. In Russian it is said like "on the table is a pen" or "it was two men". Those who use "there is" correctly are usually pretty advanced.
3. Omit and mix articles. We don't have them, we don't understand them, they are in general a major pain in the ass))
4. Forget am, is and are in present tenses. In Russian it is "He was teacher" in past tense and "He teacher" in present tense.
5. Don't use idioms, proverbs and sayings. They most probably never heard of them)
6. Mix another/other/different, job/work, say/tell/speak, say money and advice in plural. 5 thousands as well.
I could go on with the list but I think this covers the main points.
And one more thing - some female names you used weren't Russian. This girl from Sochi and that granny in the plane. For me they sounded like Polish or something. You could easily find such a girl in Russia but still it sounded a bit off.
Hmm, I wonder if I should write a manual for the authors trying to write Russians)))
Well, I hope my criticism was constructive and helpful and not two obnoxious. I want to tell you again that I've enjoyed your stories immensely and hope you will keep this on. Thanks again!
| Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 32 . 6/16/2012
Amazing story/ies! I love how there were a few different plotlines and they were all put into one. IT made it seem so much more realistic.
In the first story, I like how Bella and Edward had their ups and downs, finally ending up together. I liked it much more than those sstories where she finds him again and thinks that he hates her, but then he appologises and automatically the ralationship is amazing again. I like to read stories where I can feel the emotion that the characters have, and with this one I could do just that. It's almost like I was Bella in a way. LOL
Something I noticed in general is that it seems too obvious that they're vampires. When she's moving out of her apartment, he can tell that they're overly strong. It just seems too obvious, if you can understand what I mean.
Now for the second part of the book! Firstly, I think they fell in love too fast. It may have been better if it started as a fascenation and then grew from there.
Also, Tanya seems a bit OOC. I can kind of see why, but I just wanted to let you know.
Also in the ending, there's something I need to be cleared up on a bit. In BD, Bella has a shield. Does she have that in this story or not? He can't read her mind when she's a human, and I didn't understand if he could after she was changed. In the last chapter, did she say that she was trying to keep her thoughts from him... or am I just reading too far into this?
All in all, you enspire me to be a better writer. Keep up the great work! :)
| Permanently Inactive Account chapter 16 . 4/10/2012
I have spent literally hours trying to find this fanfiction. LOST was the first fanfiction I ever read, and I've been addicted ever since. This story creates so many sentimental memories for me. 2 years later, I've finally found it and read it.
I couldn't imagine a better ending for a story two years ago, and that opinion still stands. I love this story beyond imagination, and it will forever rank in my faves.
| sparkles107 chapter 16 . 2/26/2012
I LOVED THIS! :D
| TifAlyson33 chapter 32 . 1/15/2012
OMG, i love this story. great plot. and i love how you ended this chapter!
| Alice Hightopp K chapter 1 . 12/30/2011
I love your story but I only speak Spanish and I want read the story in Spanish.
Can you help me?
I really can not speak English well, so, here is the Spanish text
Amo tu historia pero solo hablo español y quiero leer la historia en español.
| visitor chapter 2 . 12/23/2011
been a while since I've read this fanfic, but its still as good a I remembered. Your writing is smooth and flows very well and I really enjoyed reading it :)
| Bellasmum chapter 16 . 12/15/2011
I love your story !