|Reviews for LOST and LOST 2|
| Bonifashka chapter 32 . 6/17/2012
This story is great. Both of them are. I especially liked the epilogue. They suck in the most fanfics I've read (and in many actual books as well) so far but yours is spot on. :) I also like that you give the vampires purpose and careers. It's one of the greatest flaws in Meier's world. You can't live aimlessly for several hundred years, you'll kill yourself out of boredom:))
Now I want to give you several critical comments about the story if you don't mind. I am Russian and I am an English teacher to boot so I have some experience with "broken English")) The best sentence I've even seen was "At me eat dog" which was a word-to-word translation of "I have a dog". I don't think you will rewrite the story now but if you ever try writing Russian speaking English again it will sound more natural if you use these tips:
1. Russian has only 3 tense forms so those who don't speak English well enough are likely to use only simple tenses, present continuous at most. And definitely not perfect ones. Especially the constructions like "might have been". In Russian it is something like "might was" or even "could be was". In most cases present perfect will be replaced by past simple and in cases like "I've been living in Moscow" when the action (or state, whatever) hasn't ended yet it will be present for a Russian.
2. There be is a difficult case, too. In Russian it is said like "on the table is a pen" or "it was two men". Those who use "there is" correctly are usually pretty advanced.
3. Omit and mix articles. We don't have them, we don't understand them, they are in general a major pain in the ass))
4. Forget am, is and are in present tenses. In Russian it is "He was teacher" in past tense and "He teacher" in present tense.
5. Don't use idioms, proverbs and sayings. They most probably never heard of them)
6. Mix another/other/different, job/work, say/tell/speak, say money and advice in plural. 5 thousands as well.
I could go on with the list but I think this covers the main points.
And one more thing - some female names you used weren't Russian. This girl from Sochi and that granny in the plane. For me they sounded like Polish or something. You could easily find such a girl in Russia but still it sounded a bit off.
Hmm, I wonder if I should write a manual for the authors trying to write Russians)))
Well, I hope my criticism was constructive and helpful and not two obnoxious. I want to tell you again that I've enjoyed your stories immensely and hope you will keep this on. Thanks again!
| Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 32 . 6/16/2012
Amazing story/ies! I love how there were a few different plotlines and they were all put into one. IT made it seem so much more realistic.
In the first story, I like how Bella and Edward had their ups and downs, finally ending up together. I liked it much more than those sstories where she finds him again and thinks that he hates her, but then he appologises and automatically the ralationship is amazing again. I like to read stories where I can feel the emotion that the characters have, and with this one I could do just that. It's almost like I was Bella in a way. LOL
Something I noticed in general is that it seems too obvious that they're vampires. When she's moving out of her apartment, he can tell that they're overly strong. It just seems too obvious, if you can understand what I mean.
Now for the second part of the book! Firstly, I think they fell in love too fast. It may have been better if it started as a fascenation and then grew from there.
Also, Tanya seems a bit OOC. I can kind of see why, but I just wanted to let you know.
Also in the ending, there's something I need to be cleared up on a bit. In BD, Bella has a shield. Does she have that in this story or not? He can't read her mind when she's a human, and I didn't understand if he could after she was changed. In the last chapter, did she say that she was trying to keep her thoughts from him... or am I just reading too far into this?
All in all, you enspire me to be a better writer. Keep up the great work! :)
| Permanently Inactive Account chapter 16 . 4/10/2012
I have spent literally hours trying to find this fanfiction. LOST was the first fanfiction I ever read, and I've been addicted ever since. This story creates so many sentimental memories for me. 2 years later, I've finally found it and read it.
I couldn't imagine a better ending for a story two years ago, and that opinion still stands. I love this story beyond imagination, and it will forever rank in my faves.
| sparkles107 chapter 16 . 2/26/2012
I LOVED THIS! :D
| TifAlyson33 chapter 32 . 1/15/2012
OMG, i love this story. great plot. and i love how you ended this chapter!
| Alice Hightopp K chapter 1 . 12/30/2011
I love your story but I only speak Spanish and I want read the story in Spanish.
Can you help me?
I really can not speak English well, so, here is the Spanish text
Amo tu historia pero solo hablo español y quiero leer la historia en español.
| visitor chapter 2 . 12/23/2011
been a while since I've read this fanfic, but its still as good a I remembered. Your writing is smooth and flows very well and I really enjoyed reading it :)
| Bellasmum chapter 16 . 12/15/2011
I love your story !
| reader962 chapter 1 . 10/15/2011
I already read this story on . Your's was on top ten there, right?
Well...i was just searching through and thought had any reader used this idea in any story. I searched and tada...I found Lost. I loved this story earlier and even now.
I read it nearly a year ago.
And i still read and love it.
| snickers937 chapter 16 . 9/27/2011
i really like the story, in the beginning i found it a little weird that bella's older than edward but got over it when the story started to turn out interesting
thx sooo much for publishing this, and for not going in details when writing the fuzzy intimate parts that makes u go YUK! :D
anyway, great work, i'm sooooo subscribing to u :D
| snickers937 chapter 1 . 9/23/2011
i really like the beginning, and i like how u gave an edge to bella's character but running? don't u think that's a little extreme? :D anyway i like how u made bella a strong independent person
i'm soooooooo subscribing 2 u :D
| mimimomo chapter 19 . 9/21/2011
Aaaawwwww... Simmons. I love him!
| mimimomo chapter 17 . 9/21/2011
I enjoyed Lost, and I'm sure I'm going to love Lost2 too! I like this Simmons character! I secretly thought it would be interesting if Bella fell for Simmons and let Edward stay in agony...I'm evil, lol.
| madmomof4 chapter 18 . 7/4/2011
STILL love going back and re-reading these stories!
| Isita Maria chapter 1 . 6/20/2011
Hi Im Isita Maria, i wrote you a PM abt the book club, i'm trying to send you the questions and all the information but it seems you have your PM disabled could you plz give me you mail address on a pm ... club book meeting is this saturday...