|Reviews for Lost Love of Genesis|
| Ranga123 chapter 1 . 4/18/2009
oh that was so good
umm when gaza got fuzed in with the genisis tree does it have anything to do with that?
im excited i wana no!
heh heh keep going yay
| Barako chapter 1 . 10/18/2007
Um... whose perspective is this from, anyway? To me it seemed like you were trying to switch around a lot, but I don't really know what the heck happened at all because your writing was extremely confusing...
If you want to write from a bunch of different people's views in the same chapter I'd recommend using third person, otherwise... switching around all the time in the same chapter (in each paragraph, even!) just kinda makes your readers not understand what the hell just happened. ;_;