Reviews for The Reveal
brandywyne chapter 1 . 10/21/2007
You've done a nice job with your character Stasi. I like the way you developed a 'trilogy' around her and worked her into the real history and into the Young Rebels. Your style is very fast paced and action-packed much like the show. 'Swashbuckling' might well describe it!

As for constructive criticism, I recommend slowing down a bit on your next story. Let us see what they see, smell what they smell. Set up and develop the scenes more. Put us in the location with the characters more but not so much as to lose this personal 'swashbuckling' style that you clearly have going for you.