Reviews for After the Training, The War
narutojazz19 chapter 49 . 3/31
I love it! I love what you did with your story! I'm so glad I found it after you finished the storyline otherwise I might've had a aneurysm from the suspense of waiting for each chapter . There were a lot of spelling errors but I still didn't care because the plot in the story line was absolutely fantastic! Thank you so much for your dedication and your imagination to create this fun story.
Your fan always
-Jazzy-
Shinobi Gatana chapter 17 . 12/14/2016
Is Hinata's nee-chan the spy? Hm?
Shinobi Gatana chapter 14 . 12/14/2016
So Naruto won't likely get promoted, or Hokage in this story? The fact that you stated that he isn't leadership material is 'bunk' in my opinion as he has a habit of making enemies allies, and coming up with strategies on the fly. But ce la vie. Good story so far.
Hekima chapter 49 . 12/11/2016
The end! Feel something lose. From the start of extended training to this end, you made me to pull all nighter for 2 straight days...I admit there were times I raised my eyebrowns for some questionable things (like hinata didn't use elemental jutsu when she fought with Sauske first time), over all, it's a good,no, a great story.
I usually dun like OC cos some are so powerful making story unbelieable. I found your story for sometime but don't read cos of OC, i really regret my opnion after reading your character Takara. The royki clan bloodlines, and sannin, clan village, symbol...all are well plotted. I am not sure whether you have time to read comments but if you do, I want you to know, I am supporting your character Takara & look forward to your future stories( including short stories like Genin Tale)...Thanks for creating stories for us, to take a brake from the stressful daily work...Ganbatte kudasai!
littlepans chapter 49 . 5/12/2014
This story is very well thought out. This is amazing!
equastar chapter 34 . 2/22/2014
hmm the way Hinata got annoyed at every thing Megumi did became like how the fourth Hokage failed Obito, afraid she will became the biggest criminal like Obito too
equastar chapter 33 . 2/22/2014
nice story again, btw in the stories it said that paper chakra didn't reack to Aiko chakra( no element) different from Hinata have all 5, but in her you said Aiko master 2 element, , so i'm kind of wonder if mastering elemental dragon is different than mastering elemental chakra, thank you
equastar chapter 29 . 2/22/2014
the story is great so far, but i found that Hinata age doen't match up ( i read this fic directly after extended)
1. I really don't know the real time Hinata met Takara (you said she look about 12/11) but look can be deceiving, so i tried to match her age with her student, the 1st time Hinata enter chuunin exam was the same year of her graduate(that's why they are rookie), around the same year before the 2nd chuunin exam Hinata was exiled (if you said her student age right now is 13/borderline 14 after skip 1 exam, after that failed the next exam, then this exam should be in their 3 years so the possibility is academy graduate at age 11/borderline 12).
2. After that you said after the 2nd exam Hinata was 15, even though it's still in year 1 of Naruto training and also you said in the fic the time spend between Hinata exiled and her challenging her family again(Neji) was only 6 month

if we match up the age then didn't the 1st time Takara found Hinata was at the age of 12/borderline 13 or1 year into the future since 1st chuunin exam( Takara guess 11/12) then 6 month into the future she challenge her family, so the time of her chuunin exam to the time of her meeting Naruto at the spa was within this 6 month right, so if we assume at that time her age was late 12 or early 13 and not long after she got her jounin.

So that's why i'm confuse why after she is success 2nd chuunin exam her age at that spa was 15, even though she challenge her family again only in 6 month time since her exiled, because if my calculation is correct then shouldn't she is only 13 at that time, i'm really hoping you will reply to this, thank you
ArtisticAngel6 chapter 49 . 2/24/2012
i loved this squeal! it was a really good story
sarcastic-cynicism chapter 1 . 2/21/2012
I have read your stories from the very beginning. I was even there when you posted the first chapters of 'The Extended Training of Hyuga Hinata'. I remember checking my e-mail every day for YEARS, hoping that you posted another chapter. I have never been obsessed with a writer and his/her stories before, not even after all the time that's passed after you posted the end of 'After the Training, the War'. Well as it seems, a few weeks ago I remembered your story, how good it was. I suddenly got a strong urge to read both your stories again.

I feared that I would't like them as much because I had already read them and sometimes I forget a story and exaggerate how awesome it was. With you, that was not the case. Here I have been neglecting my studies for weeks past, reading chapter after chapter of both your fictions. Today i finally finished and just like the first time I finished, I'm kind of sad. It's the end of an era.

Either way, I am so happy that I chose to look you up again because honestly, the story is even better than I remembered. I was surprised at times, crying at others, and even laughing my butt of! I just wanted to say that you have real talent within you and I hope you become some sort of writer in the future.

Now that I'm done with that, this is a review. One thing I absolutely HAVE to say is that I hate made-up characters put into series that are already shaped with characters. But no, Takara is absolutely the greatest I have ever seen. From the start I like her personality and caring nature and sense of humor. You told a story revolving around this character in a way that didn't feel pushed into the series and existing characters. Their relationships were genuine and that was the most that make me love her. Hinata is another that i also loved. She started out weak and lost, but watching her grow up into a strong shinobi was an incredible experience for me. Her molding took lengthy chapters and patience, but that is what makes it great. It was also genuine for me.

I could talk about this story for months, I swear, but I'm guessing you're probably tired of me rambling about something you wrote a long time ago. I just wanted to show you how much I appreciated your story and how I will never forget the legendary LMD with her Hinata-centered fics that I still love. Hope all is well with you, xxburuxx
ladymiyah chapter 49 . 7/10/2011
Really good story, but I cannot believe you killed off Sasuke! That's depressing!
NeitherSaneNorInsane chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
Inswear tsunade was the fifth. Anyway. Yay you have a sequel and it's finished so no waiting for updates lol. Hope this is action packed too
Wolf prince arcturus chapter 49 . 4/9/2011
to make it perfect you should have had naruto propose during a meteor shower
deactivated lol chapter 49 . 12/20/2010
Awesome! Loved your story and thanks for staying with it even through the harsh times (jobs, school, etc...) I hope you continue writing stories. )
deactivated lol chapter 2 . 12/19/2010
Awesome chapter! I've read the prequel to this and I must say that within every chapter your writing improves! Keep up the good work! )

Side note/ I though Tsunade was the Fifth Hokage..?
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