|Reviews for Something Hentai This Way Comes|
| firebluebird2006 chapter 2 . 3/13
so you abandoned this story
| Sean Malloy-1 chapter 2 . 12/18/2015
Sorry about your friend, but a new story doesn't mean you have to cancel an old one. Any idea when you might update "Nindo of the Force"?
| Ranmachanisme2 chapter 2 . 12/8/2015
LOL Too funny
| The Keeper of Worlds chapter 2 . 12/6/2015
Cool:). And my condolences to you for your friend
| irnzenmonk chapter 1 . 8/2/2013
| Ranmaleopard chapter 1 . 2/13/2012
this is really awesome and interesting i cant wait to see what happens next please continue!
| chm01 chapter 1 . 5/18/2011
so any chance for an update soon?
| Ganheim chapter 1 . 4/14/2009
for hence forth thou
[The ‘for’ doesn’t look necessary]
performed misogi, sprinkling water on the walkway towards her house at this time of day to wash away sin from her front steps.
[That ‘time of day’ always seems to be when he’s passing by]
[Unnecessary Japanese (it’s also miscapitalized, and probably would serve better as a suffix than prefix)]
having her okāsan around
[Unnecessary Japanese: we got the point at first, but there’s no reason to replace ‘mother’ with ‘okaasan’ every single time]
oyagi, which was an impolite way of saying “father”,
[While true, it’s still unnecessary Japanese]
the lazy baka
She stepped through the threshold beneath the noren, a short curtain found hanging in the entrances to restaurants,
[Interesting, but unnecessary. I feel more like I’m reading a cultural orientation than a fanfic]
chopping a large white daikon, a kind of white squash.
[Also difficult to cook into a good meal, but for whatever reason squash of all sorts never seems to be cooperative when I’m trying to cook it]
“A ... Arigato. Uh, where's okāsan?”
her reluctant iinazuke
[Unnecessary Japanese. Guess what? When you stick with the main story language, you make the story easier to read for the audience. Gasp! What a concept!]
get a bath. Ja.”
noticed him. “Konbanwa,
“Tadaima!” came Akane's
from the genkan, the place were you leave your shoes by the front door.
“Okerineesai!” Nabiki answered welcome.
“Hai.” Akane nodded
“Ara. Where did
since her baka son
Daisuke.” he told
[A comma for transition to the direct speech tag would serve better than the period creating a full stop]
Oyagi had been
i a raspy voice.
Its the only answer.”
Its time he
“Arigato ... otōsan.”
The baka couldn't
How the bokuto wielding baka
somethings going on with him.”
and said, “Hai.”
Historical and cultural research done in “Japanese Culture” by Paul Varley, University of Hawaii Press, ISBN 0-8248-2152-1.
[Your recommendation points to a good book, but while you’re at least explaining/expanding on the terms instead of just unceremoniously jamming them into the story, it’s still awkward.]
| Jigoku no Yami chapter 1 . 5/30/2008
You must update. Please. I want to see what Ranma will do when he snaps...A lot of females are gonna be sore, thats for sure.
| Ranmawho1 chapter 1 . 11/24/2007
XD This story is hilarious! (and very well written) Please continue, I don't wanna see a story this funny fall to the way-side.
| King of Darkness chapter 1 . 11/23/2007
Very, very nice.
| Sdarian chapter 1 . 11/12/2007
While this looks pretty good, I'm curious as to how you'll continue it. While I do hope to read more, it really seems to be going in the direction of major lemon. While I enjoy those too, they don't care too much for them here on Anyway, good luck!
| DCWestby chapter 1 . 11/5/2007
Good start. Keep going.
| Ten-Faced Paladin chapter 1 . 11/5/2007
Ranma is in serious trouble. That's all I can say. Update soon.
| Unknowing chapter 1 . 10/28/2007
Nice setup so far, can't wait to see where you take this.