Reviews for Key To My Heart
GreenPurple18 chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
poor poor chloe... update soon. k? k.
xxXAngel of InsanityXxx chapter 1 . 9/26/2009
love it
Ravenclaw Slytherin chapter 1 . 9/25/2009
I like your story! Update soon!
Vixen's Shadow chapter 1 . 12/28/2007
Me: I feel bad for that girl! What is her name though? A spellcheck needs to be something done regularly with stories.

Kat: Short but definately good. Our main character's name is Lewis, not the other spelling! Spelling seems to be a major disconnect.

Vix: Those two seemed to have gotten most of it. The arguement was well done. Seemed a bit early to get into a larger conflict, such as a death, in your story.

All mes: Keep ( writing, geting your imagination in motion, and)Moving Forward!
contour chapter 1 . 12/14/2007
I can't wait to read the next chapter! This sounds like it's gonna be really cute!
TheOnlyEarthGirl chapter 1 . 10/31/2007
MORE NOW PLEASE!
AudacesFortunaJuvat chapter 1 . 10/27/2007
Okay, first thing: his name is LEWIS, not Louis. Yeah, I know, I thought it was Louis at first, but apparently it's not...*sigh*

I think this is a good idea, but you need to work on punctuation in your dialogue. For example, make sure you have periods after they talk:

“I am your dad”

“Not yet”

“Yes I am”

No your not”

“Yes”

“No”

“Yes”

“No”

“Ok we really need to get read for when she comes” He walked out of the room. Wilbur slowly followed as a smile spread across his lips.

“I won”

COMPARED TO

“I am your dad[!]”

“Not yet.”

“Yes I am.”

No [you're] (this is the right form of "you're") not.”

“Yes.”

“No.”

“Yes."

“No.”

“Ok we really need to get read for when she comes[,]” He walked out of the room. Wilbur slowly followed as a smile spread across his lips.

“I won.”

See? I put brackets around the ones I corrected.

Well, great job! It's just the little tiny things that need fixing...Update soon?

~Fortuna
Nausicaa of the Spirits chapter 1 . 10/24/2007
Hmm, interesting. Update soon!