Reviews for Nine Hours Late
Always.Cryd.Confidently chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
Haha... is it bad that I found this so very cute XD sex isn't supposed to be cute, but I just found it so well written and it just struck me as cute. It was good though. I loved it
simplysmut chapter 1 . 6/2/2010
As stated in my other fic, the review button *used* to be the way I describe it. Oh well.
Becca chapter 1 . 5/31/2010
Actually, the review button is blue the first time you click it for a story...
It'sawhisper chapter 1 . 3/10/2010
Eh, it was alright
gitgit chapter 1 . 8/8/2008
ahahhaha i loved hte last line and the way you said animalistic and the way they behaved tsk tsk

and 9 hours late ch ch ch
petitesorciere chapter 1 . 11/27/2007
I really liked the way you used short sentences. Tense but in a good way...;-)
Punkindoodle chapter 1 . 11/20/2007
This was very very good. I loved the way it was written!

Punkin
xxxdark.wishesxxx chapter 1 . 11/15/2007
wow. it was good! entertaining
Verite chapter 1 . 11/3/2007
Damn. Now I have to take a cold shower.

Verite
Wudelfin chapter 1 . 10/31/2007
well done pet...well done
BON chapter 1 . 10/31/2007
you call that intense?
hellakat chapter 1 . 10/27/2007
This was done quite well. Your opening sentence captivated my attention at once, and the flow of the story, overall, is fairly good.

I liked this. You handled the subject matter tastefully, and the emotional overtures between the characters were evident.

Overall, I think this was pretty good. My criticisms are, however, that you should try embed a bit more of the characters, Draco and Hermione, into your plotline. While you managed to capture the emotions of the characters, the essence of the characters in this particular piece is lacking, and I think if you did that, the story will be more moving.

I am being nit-picky here. :) This is really a nice fic, so keep that in mind.

Having just read your other work on this site, you have progressed as a writer (which is very excellent to see). I won't try attribute reasons to why you write, but "Nine Hours Late" was a much better work than "So Here I Am". "Nine Hours Late" shows a much more sophisticated approach to writing. While the piece has flaws, you've definitely improved as a writer, and there is a poignancy to your writing that is amazing and inspiring to see. :) Writing in a moving way is very hard, and I suspect you'll be improving by leaps and bounds.

Why nitpick at the technical aspects? Generally, grasping the technical aspects will allow you better leverage in communicating the intangible, emotional and evocative.

You definitely have potential to become an amazing writer. Again, I emphasise on the point of characterisation, If you manage to make your fics partially character studies, you should find your writing to be more poignant and provocative. :)

Good luck, and good work!
LameyDovey chapter 1 . 10/26/2007
I like it! That was like... all a frenzy. Nice short ficlet! [:

So... keep writing! :D

love, LD.
Nika chapter 1 . 10/25/2007
While not as good as your previous effort, it was still enjoyable. And about one hundred thousan time better than a lot of the stories posted here.

Once again, a good effort.
pandaheart chapter 1 . 10/24/2007
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