Reviews for I: The Surface
Nigtalea chapter 3 . 10/5/2008
Loser say what! The Organization has to be saved from GABRIEL!

BTW Great Story!
Hero Of The Hazard chapter 2 . 7/3/2008
[It was just like those cheesy fan fics where the character –usually a girl- gets sucked into the Kingdom Hearts game.]

-Cough- What do you know? It is!

Yeah funny stories like these~
chickenisntvegan chapter 1 . 4/30/2008
I didn't know that The Floor was a sequel... Oh well i know now, and that makes this story easier to understand. When a new person starts talking you should start a new paragraph, i really got confused about who was talking. It's good though, can't wait to read the rest!
somethinggives chapter 10 . 1/3/2008
hey i really like your story its really cool...i haven't added a story yet...cause well *rubs back of neck* i can't figure it out...but i like it exspecially the 'o, were playing opposites now'...thats really funny well see ya

-somethinggives
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 20 . 12/4/2007
YOU SUCK! HOW DARE YOU MAKE ME CRY AT THE LAST CHAPTER! NOW I'M GONNA GO GOTH, THANK YOU! NOT FAIR NOT FAIR NOT FAIR!

(Just kidding about the goth thing, but it made me sad)

That wasn't a cliffhanger, just a chapter that makes me want to go cry into Orochimaru's shoulder (O.o did I just type that?).

But wait...it didn't say that Gabe died...GASP! I must read on...

~Emerald Solstice (sobs wolfy tears into Saix's hair)
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 19 . 12/4/2007
My goodness am I proud of you! You have significantly improved since "A debt to Be Paid"! I was on edge for a moment there...but if you ask me, Ansem's castle and Maleficent's base are too close together...I'm still confused about Gabe altogether, but oh well.

Keep it up!

~Emerald Solstice (gnaws on one of Leon's belts)
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 18 . 11/23/2007
things are heating up!

~Emerald solstice (runs from a berserk Saix who just figured out that I ripped his coat!)

ps. Sorry, I wouldn't figure out anything else to write.
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 17 . 11/23/2007
yay! I could actually tell who was talking! (runs around Saix in circles, howling with happy tears) Thank you!

Anyhoo, good chapter!

~Emerald Solstice

ps. (promote my story! I've been doing you the favor!)
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 16 . 11/23/2007
poor gabe...wha!

Anyhoo, pretty good, much more eventful than the last chappie...I think I'll go get some eggnog...yum...

Keep going!

~Emerald Solstice (accidentally rips Saix's coat with teeth)
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 15 . 11/23/2007
oh goodness...I wish makeup would magically appear in my O.13 coat (wait, it has no pockets...ugh...) or regular coat...*SIGH*

Pretty good chappie though it was a bit senseless...dull, I guess you could say? Nothing really happened at all...oh well, maybe that's why it's called "Procrastinate".

Ciao!

~Emerald Solstice (grabs the edge of Saix's coat with teeth and begins to pull and play tug-o-war)

(I'm still your wolfy editory at heart!)
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 14 . 11/23/2007
So, the real Gabe is running around out there, making everyone devilishly worried about him...what a pansy...

Anyhoo, another good chappie, I'll keep reading...
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 13 . 11/23/2007
boo! I'm bacck! ...I don't think you're happy enough!

Anyhoo, good chappie! Few grammatical errors, but hey, we all have them! Keep going...though I'd really like to know who is talking!

~Emerald Solstice
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 11 . 11/16/2007
I loved the check-up... "DON'T WRITE THAT DOWN!"

Anyhoo, getting a bit clearer in the storyline. Please, for goodness' sake, tell who's view you're writing from! Example

Vexen's view:

"Your shoulder is badly swollen," I noted aloud. I could tell it would need an operation for the wing joint was bent thirty degrees out of place and an internal cyst had grown on the muscle. I slowly pushed down on Gabriel's back to get him to relax and swiftly stepped over to a locked cabinet to retrieve an IV of anesthesia. Reviewing his health report I calculated how much he would need. "I'm going to have to remove a cyst."

Gabriel's view:

The news wasn't a surprise considering the excruciating pain in my shoulder. At this point I was thankful for anything. His icy hands pushed me down, making me shiver when they left my back.

You know, something like that. There were many times where I got confused as to who's view it was. Keep that in mind

This story is getting much better, but it sounds an aweful lot like DNAngel...

Ciao!

~Your nutty editor,

Berserk WOLF! (I got key happy)
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 10 . 11/16/2007
better chapter by far. But, if you would please read the PM I'll send you, I've got some things to discuss with you about your story.

Nice Cliffhanger! Gabe's the anti-angel and cole is the angel, right?

~Berserk Wolf
Dragon Princess Orochiko chapter 8 . 11/16/2007
eek...

I like the building tension in the beginning of the chapter that only led to Gabe getting a bottle of coke...lol...

It was a tad dry in a few places but hey, every story has them. By the way, was I right in saying that the winged boy was Dark?

~Berserk Wolf (runs in circles, chasing tail)
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