|Reviews for Legaia: After the End|
| Barako chapter 3 . 10/27/2007
Hi Cheat! :D
It's good to see you writing more fanfiction! And this one is definitely better than the rest.
I do agree with what the other reviewer said though, the manner of speech does seem a bit odd for them. ;; And for some reason, I thought the three talking in the first chapter were the three Haris, probably because you had them call each other 'brother'... but that's probably just because I'm a dork. n_n;
Anyway, looking forward to reading more! You've amped up the mystery and now I'm itching to find out what the heck you have in store :P
| Tamaki chapter 1 . 10/26/2007
Haha, I dare say this is better than your other stories as well!
It's nice to see you are not using script format (it appeared you were using it for one of your stories) and it's nice to see the good ol' Ra-Seru pondering. xD
You didn't often see them ponder to each other, neh?
You gave nice descriptions that matched the character; however, I didn't find the manner of speech well fitting for them... I can't exactly recall them ever talking like that in the game seeing there seemed to be a greater wisdom etched into their words...
The prologue was quite interesting; ready to set the stage for the story, and I do see promise in it. I hope you shall get better at descriptions and such as the story progresses