Reviews for Awakenings
Samurai Crunchbird chapter 4 . 11/19/2007

I had to look back at Chapter 2 to remind myself as to what happened so far. I started to get all gloomy again.

Then, I read the initial exchange between the scientists. I loved the 'mutated lunch' conversation.

When Shego made her entrance...(sounds of cats hissing and yowling as if ready to fight) was priceless!

Whoa...way to shift gears when Ron and Shego met at the chapel. It was really a touching moment at the end.

I have an idea as to a direction toward which you could point the story. It may seem a little 'far-fetched' for the average person, but you already said:

"...considering the weird things you four do on a daily basis, I guess it actually makes sense."

I will send the idea to you in a PM. This way, I won't spoil it for the readers if you actually want to *use* it!

Your friend in writing,

The Samurai Crunchbird
DJ Dubois chapter 4 . 11/19/2007

While I'm not sure about all of the AI stuff with Drakken, Mr. D. P., etc., I really do like the scenes with Ron struggling with his feelings for Kim and Yori not to mention his faith.

Loved that last admission scene BTW by Shego and Ron's admission of faith. That really hit the mark.

Keep going or write a sequel.

Thanks for sharing!
RDF-73 chapter 4 . 11/19/2007
Nice story update soon
Samurai Crunchbird chapter 2 . 11/1/2007

Man...three different people taking the blame for KP's RIP status. Even with all that heat surrounding those characters, Dr. Director was ice-cold in her assessment of Shego.

Even with all of this gloom and doom, there was a faint glimmer of humor...

“What do you think you’re doing to my sidekick, sidekick?”

It was just enough to provide a little balance to the story.

Your friend in writing,

The Samurai Crunchbird
RDF-73 chapter 1 . 10/29/2007
A good start hope to see more soon.
Samurai Crunchbird chapter 1 . 10/28/2007

My friend, this was one heck of a start to this final story of the arc. Plot-wise, the foundation has been established quite well.

Your prologue has written a rather huge check. Let's just hope the rest of the story can cash it!

Now for the 'other side'...You know it's coming...

It still seems like you are cramming two or three paragraphs into one. I know what it's like to be on a roll, wanting to get all your thoughts out there as fast as your fingers can type them. That said, people can see the blues and reds of a painting a lot better if they are not surrounded by purple borders where they meet.

Your friend in writing,

The Samurai Crunchbird
Ace Ian Combat chapter 1 . 10/28/2007
Poor Shego, to be that tortured by what she feels she's responsible for.
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