|Reviews for Perfect Everything|
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/30/2013
| YaoiGirl1997 chapter 1 . 10/31/2010
More please please please!
| CapriciousxHarmony chapter 1 . 4/18/2009
I love it! This makes me reread it over and over again. I can't stop smiling too! Add more on! I want to see and read more. Please?
| VampwithAttitude chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
OMG! his DAD! cool story, nice descriptions too.
| ilovewriting23 chapter 1 . 12/24/2008
i'm very fond of this story
| x.imagine.x chapter 1 . 11/2/2008
that was actually kind of cute... considering it was about abuse. I liked it though.
| Sandshrew777 chapter 1 . 10/5/2008
Hurray for drama! I love it as much as anybody else, really, and although it can be melodramatic at times, it's not too bad here. :) Guess what I'm trying to say is that although the "trouble" in this one-shot is kinda coming out of nowhere, you do it well enough for me to be okay with that. ;)
I had a little trouble placing the scene, as I was thinking of the final film and not the third one, but once I figured it out I appreciated what you were doing a lot more. Marnie's internal monologue was really quite nice. Her self-deprecation wasn't over the top, but merely endearing. Her line in the beginning ("How was it possible that Ethan could turn something as simple as sipping on hot chocolate in his pajamas on the couch, so… adorable?") made me happy. :) Good call.
I think the dialogue is natural, and that's something I always look for in a story. These characters could've had this conversation...you know, had the Halloweentown movies not had such horrible writers behind the scripts. The plot was okay, but the dialogue...not so hot. Oy. LOL.
The one thing that bugged me was that there was almost no build-up to Ethan's revelation. Marnie made the logical leap way too quickly for me. Draw out that conversation. Give us more so that Marnie can figure out what's wrong with Ethan (and she can think of this consciously - she's got to keep him talking so she can study him now that they have a moment alone!) and so Ethan's kiss is the climax of suspense and not just an adorable little move on his part.
And thanks for injecting Ethan's really creepy flirting technique...I'm not the only one who thought his dialogue in the final Halloweentown film was really, really suggestive, am I? It was very not Disney, at least to me. :p
Overall, a really nice fic that I'm glad I found. :) If you delayed the confession for longer - at least twice as long as you have it now, I'd recommend - you'd have a total hit on your hands. It's still a gem right now, though. :)
| StarlightFilly chapter 1 . 1/22/2008
wo I love it! Hope you write more!
| Jay chapter 1 . 12/29/2007
I kinda liked it, seems nice.
As if their love already blossomed from there.
| M.L. Shards chapter 1 . 11/6/2007
Oh... I love this story
| my untold fairy-tale chapter 1 . 11/1/2007
You already know what I think of this. It is the cutest little semi dramatic Ethan/Marnie fluff ever invented! Poor Ethan. . .*gathers a mob of fangirls to atack Mr. Dalloway* Yay, finally some Marnie/Ethan fluff. I've now read this 3 and 1/2 times.
Keep up the excellent tag-team fiction writing work.