Hello there,

This is a very sweet story you've written. I loved the relationship you created between Willy and Cocoa, especially how you described their bond's road to recovery. Nothing felt rushed, slow, or anything like that. You held a good pace. There was no place that the characters acted irrationally. I found the story very enjoyable.

Thank you for the story.

hi, it's me again

OMG what a terrible past Cocoa had after the showjumping accident!

anyways, this story is going really well. i love reading it!

-SPUD (again)

very interesting storyline you have going here! I too am also a die-hard horse lover, so that's especailly what drew me to your story. also, it's an original thought-having Willy adopt an animal.

one suggestion, as i've been reading (only got thru ch 3 so far)i've noticed you use the word 'stuff' a lot, especailly in the second-to-last paragraph in ch 3. id suggest mixing the words up a lil more -'stuff' is a fine word to use in some instances, but try elaborating a bit more on what the 'stuff' is.

otherwise, very well done...and im gonna keep reading!

-SPUD