|Reviews for Searching for Starlight|
| FervaTrouble chapter 2 . 2/26/2013
Ooooh why have you not update this? I wanted to follow the story!
| Mentor Donatello chapter 2 . 12/1/2007
I actually just skimmed the first chapter, mostly because I figured that this would be the most recent one, and therefore the fairest to critique.
Anyhow, I actually have no gripes. You're not remotely the rough, new fanfiction writer I usually come to critique, first of all. Your punctuation is fine- tidy, reasonable, used properly. Your spelling mistakes were non-existent, your grammar was solid, and your tenses did not flop like salmon. I commend your good use of wording, also. It was nice to read and easy to follow, and it matched the pace of the actual books quite well. Excellent use of detail, especially that which came straight from the novels themselves. It lent you an extra air of authenticity.
Additionally, you chose a somewhat interesting character, since he's not terribly mainstream and as far as I'm aware, there aren't already a thousand fictions about him to begin with.
Tastefully executed. Best of luck to you.
P.S. You're in the right avenue to do some original fiction. I hope you will at some point. :)