|Reviews for The Demon Headmaster Strikes Again!|
| Silversaz chapter 1 . 12/9/2007
its short but shorts good. i like the mystery at the beginning.u may hav a good story going,so plz KEEP WRITING!
| RedDragon30000 chapter 1 . 11/2/2007
A good first chapter, you had me wondering why the park is empty. Would you be offeneded if I advised you on some improvements you could make?
You clearly showed me what was happening, and I liked the way you had the Demon Headmaster's words echoing in Dinah's , maybe if you wrote more about how Dinah felt as she entered the park and saw it empty, saying how creepy the emptiness makes it. I also think you could have made it a bit longer. It is clear Dinah can't stop thinking about the Demon Headmaster, maybe you could mention what her last encounter with him was like?
Anyway, a good start and I hope you write more! _