Reviews for Flabbergasted Phenomenon
EmmiLuvsEdwardCullen chapter 3 . 11/22/2007
Happy thanksgiving to you too! :)

I like this chapter, it's very well written, good job! Update soon ;)
shelbymarie04 chapter 3 . 11/21/2007
The beginning was so cute. I love the whole chapter, but it was entirely too short! Update extremely soon!
Topaz-Sapphires chapter 2 . 11/21/2007
i cant wait for he next chapter i loved your other story the death of isabella marie swan please update soon
adrienne.hope chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
[sleepy thumbs up]
Gabriels-girl5035 chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
great story please update soon!
EmmiLuvsEdwardCullen chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
I loved your story, the death of Isabella marie swan, I can't wait to see what happens next! Great job )
Dr. Cullen chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
that was really good, can you pretty please hurry up and write, write like the wind
Dr. Cullen chapter 1 . 11/11/2007
nice opening chapter, lets go and read the rest now shall we
leechlover chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
great story! So why did she faint... usually pregnant women don't randonmy pass out... but whatever... still very good story
leechlover chapter 1 . 11/11/2007
Hm... Very good!
ditzy-klutz-kaitlyn chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
This is good. I read you other twilight story, andi love them both.
taintedbutterflypotterfan chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
aw, thats a cute story:) update!
Biloxi Girl chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
Great beginning! Hope you'll update soon!
mandymuggle chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
"(Note: You would know my favorite subject if you read a few of my HP fanfics!)"

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Haha, don't worry about it, it's a perfectly healthy favorite subject! Most of the fan-fics I read have it in them, and that's how I found "Unplanned Pregnancies"! :P

Now, onto a more constructive criticism matter, I noticed that you keep on switching in and out of third person; most of the time it was when Bella was thinking to herself. Also, you have a way of repeating yourself... for instance,

"I rolled my eyes when he growled at me. When I returned my eyes to the picture, my mind was on Edward, and what he was dying to tell me. He’s been pestering me as if this information was vital to my survival—I rolled my eyes at the thought. I wasn’t going to be surviving for much longer."

You put two "I rolled my eyes at the thought" in one paragraph. I'm not exactly sure if you're supposed to do that, but my OCD-grammar mind says nay. (Oh, and also, you wrote "he's" in first person, instead of "he'd")

I'm sorry if you don't want to hear CC! If you don't, I'll never bring up the subject again. I just have a copy-editing mind, LOL.

And... wait, what happens when Bella gets changed? I still don't get that. And what do you mean by, "I wasn't going to be surviving much longer"?
EterNite chapter 2 . 11/11/2007
LOL-desu!
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