|Reviews for Worldwar: Discovering the Balance|
| Illuviar chapter 1 . 1/18
Hilarious! :D You've got O'Neil's attitude perfectly!
| justjoe chapter 10 . 12/30/2013
A very enjoyable read. I don't know either universe. However, the descriptions made this a non issue. The Race actually felt alien. Great job. I also liked seeing the Colonials as villians for a change. Their attitudes were very believable. That said, I don't like the SG universe. I find it quite unbelievable and the characters too much like obnoxious Americans. This is no reflection on the story
| EvilTheLast chapter 10 . 11/29/2013
Great story. Now I will start reading the sequel. I wonder if you should of done a BSG or SG1 crossover so more readers can find your story.
| Guest chapter 2 . 6/28/2012
I was skeptical when SG was brought into the fold, but then the BSG threw me out. I can handle a few cross overs, but when your trying to fold multiple universes in on one it makes far too much to keep track of. Already the SG universe has explored much of the surrounding areas of Sol system, they would have most assuredly explored Tau Ceti and encountered the Race on their own ground. The timeline also throws this all out, Race timeline vs SG timeline...the Race would have invaded prior...even if your adjusting the alternate history, the Race's plans detailed time as the most precious ally. You immediately altered that so much that the SG universe would have immediately won vs the Race. The only reason the Race survived as long as they did on Earth was the year they invaded.
| Hydroplatypus chapter 10 . 3/18/2012
| BigWilly526 chapter 1 . 12/4/2011
This is such a great story, one of the best on Fan Fiction
| AvidFanfic Reader chapter 1 . 10/17/2011
Well done excellently written been reading your stories for a bit know a v long bit but this is one of your best
Keep a stiff upper lip chap!
| Independent Dude chapter 1 . 10/11/2011
I liked this. I remember that Turtledove series well. I thought you did a good job of emulating Turtledove's style when writing the Race. And I liked the way you tried to take modern expressions and convert them into "Race-isms:" "You are thinking with your tailstump up your..."
Some areas for improvement:
I'm not sure Home would be as undefended as you put it. On earth, they had managed to create nuclear-armed suborbital fighters. I'm sure they would have had some in orbit around Home. Granted, you are saying that the Race doesn't believe in aliens and would be over confident in their security, but in HOmeward Bound, it's implied that the people on the Earth ship that makes it to HOme were vulnerable to being wiped out by Home's defenses, and they had to threaten the Race with nuclear destrtuction of their Earth territories if the ship was destroyed.
Also, the Race ships had Close In Weapons Systems (CWIS) similar to the Aegis cruisers; they would have been able to defend themselves against F-302's, to at least some degree.
And, what the other reviewer said about the Race laughing silently.
But, other than that, an excellent story.
| BigWilly526 chapter 10 . 9/15/2011
Amazing, probably the best Fan fiction I have ever read, I really hope you will release more of this series
| jd chapter 10 . 6/5/2011
Well that last part with the Colonials and the Race is pretty disgusting. As bad as you saying they killed ships full of Babies are you a Nazi? That had no place or need in your plot so you obviously did it for your own pleasure.
| gaul1 chapter 10 . 5/25/2011
Great story loved it, bye
| Vengeful Astartes chapter 10 . 5/7/2011
hi m8... i don't normally review that many story's and only those i really like so that fact that ur reading this review mean i really enjoy ur story, im gonna have 2 read ur other storys now ay, keep up the good work, know that this story are entertaining and addictive in a way :)now i gonna read ur sequel cya
| StarEyed2 chapter 10 . 4/24/2011
A good read - I'm off to read the sequel. But one nit pick about the end notes. Thunderer and Resolution would be BRITISH, not English. That sort of mistake is bound to annoy, if not outright offend, a fair portion of the country. I'm Scottish, I'm British, but I'm NEVER English. Ask someone from Ireland or Wales and they'll give you the same answer.
| SeraphChaos chapter 10 . 4/24/2011
Read your story, reading the sequel, the plot seems solid, though Earth is a tad bit on the overpowered side, a nuke hit or two on the surface (white repeating what everyone else has done) would've been great. Or something creative that shows that the Colonials still stand a chance against Earth.
One note, Toshkan isn't in China, the name is not Chinese either. I'd suggest a different name, and perhaps a military leader to fit with Sun Tzu. Romance of the Three Kingdoms will provide many names, but I think the Chinese would name a ship after Mao or Deng.
| Sithking Zero chapter 3 . 4/7/2011
Real quick nit-picky thing, but members of the Race don't make any sound when they laugh. You describe them as hissing when they laugh, but they don't make noise. They just open their mouths.