|Reviews for The Unfamiliar|
| mornir-brightflame chapter 3 . 11/10/2007
D that was awesome. You say the length isn't long enough, but it seems pretty long to me. Although, i wouldn't mind however much longer you want to make it.
Hayner is still an annoying little shit. It's so unnecessary the way he abuses Axel at every opportunity. And I don't get why Axel's watch beeps, and then suddenly he has to dash off .. and what about his dodgy parents..?
Can't wait for the next chapter! D
| kawaiifox1 chapter 2 . 11/10/2007
amazing! i love axel, no matter what hayner says! lolz! update soon, k?
| Vicious Blueyes chapter 3 . 11/10/2007
WHAT is going on with Axel? I am nervous, and definitely suspicious, about those stupid watch beepings...I've been trying to come up with a theory, but everything that pops into my mind seems like it'd probably turn out BAD, which isn't something I want to happen...so...I REJECT! I'll just have to wait and see what YOU have in store for our little friends...heehe
| Desolate Nightmare chapter 3 . 11/10/2007
lol, loving this fic... *hugs*
especially the: "Patience is a virtue. Patience is a virtue. "Roxie" Patience is a goddamn, fucking virtue." XD that made me laugh.
*hugs again* See ya next chapter!
| Orchid Butterflies chapter 3 . 11/10/2007
No sleep deprivation at the moment. This is a good sign. I think I can give a half-decent review this time! XD
So, Axel was a jerk waking Roxas up that early. If someone woke me up that early throwing rocks at my window, I'd probably throw something really heavy at them and go back to sleep. But that's just me. And I'm sure Axel had his reasons. Even for running off like that. Strange guy.
What next? Ah, the assignment. I couldn't help but giggle at it 'cause I recently got to re-playing Kingdom Hearts II and just got past that part in the introduction not an hour ago.
Now the toy store. The beginning to that part was pretty funny. Reminded me of the script I have for a play I'm doing for Christmas, strangely enough. What else...
I don't think I have anything more to say about this chapter! (And there was much rejoicing) This is the longest review I've left you , and quite possibly the longest review I've left in my three years on XD So, enough of my rambling. Can't wait until the next chapter!
| The Mad Empty Shell chapter 3 . 11/10/2007
The kiss was so cute!
I0m sure Hayner will be pissed off anyway - bringing a StRaNgEr to the Usual Spot with them? It's like Axel joining their quartet - Hayner, Pence, Olette, Roxas. It really sounds strange when you say: Axel, Hayner, Olette, Pence, Roxas. Axel just doesn't fit! I can't wait for pissed off Hayner! XD
| A Beautiful Breakdown chapter 2 . 11/10/2007
this is gonna be a quick one, I read this on my stop over in my travels and Ive got to pick my little brother up from University and drive us... 'home'
Know what I liked best about this chapter?
How dependant on Axel, Roxas is already. I mean I was sad when Hayner was all hatin on Roxas, but you managed to turn an angsty and annoying Roxas into a, I want to change me life, holy shit... Roxas and he's seeing Axel as a ticket. The one thing about these characters, Riku Sora, Axel Roxas.. the undeniable bond you see between them. It's like, WHAM instand friend/love. Their hearts meld in a manner thats uncontrollable. It's like, ok so Roxas doesn't want to be Axel's boyfriend their -friends- but that doesn't mean he's cancelled out the idea altogether. Oh no no no.
I like that Roxas is confused, I like that Axel is his salvation, just so long as Axel's 'doctors appointment' wasn't a... Im dying of cancer and had to go in and see how far its progressed sort of trip... *glares at you*
I think we can all relate to Roxas though... are you from a small town? cause I know I am and thats exactly how it feels. Its like you get into this groove where nothing is important and you just sort of go through the motions without even realizing that you're drowning and NEED to get out. I found I was terrified of change, but once the oppertunity presented itself I jumped on that bandwagon like a crack addict on... crack.
I think we all need an Axel, someone so open minded that it ends up being hard to ignore how right they actually are. This chapter spoke to me on so many levels... cause you're friends really don't get it. They take it personally and you're left feeling unhappy AND guilty to top it all off. Good job on that, really...
Maybe Im clueless but are they in year... 11? 12? are they in their graduating year what? Cause I think that makes a big difference too.
Much love darling, Ive got a long drive a head of me... I can't help it by the way, I adore Axel!
| mornir-brightflame chapter 2 . 11/10/2007
Hmm .. why did he feel uneasy and butterflyish and kinda sick when he said that he'd try to be fun again?
0.o Hayner is really annoying .. are you trying to make him annoying, or is it some involuntary gift? Gah he's so mean to Axel. *hugs Axel and Roxas* go away, Hayner ..
Yet again, brilliance from Pence. Awh he's great.. 'we try to take over the world' *laughs* good on you ..
| Desolate Nightmare chapter 2 . 11/9/2007
Hayner's such a weirdo XD I loved him in the game, and he's awesome in this fic too.
*huggles Roxas and Axel plushies* and these two just plain rule.
Oh... *grins* and I think I know where you got one of the scenes from. I've seen screenies of Axel and Roxas sitting eating ice cream on the clock tower :P
(sorry to those who didn't know... I'm a KH fanatic
| Gothic Melting Icecream chapter 2 . 11/9/2007
-sigh- Roxas, what are we gonna do with you? I would kill to have Axel flirting with me like that XD I really love your Axel in this, especially his flirty, innuendo-laced way of talking. For me, that definitely added bonus points to him.
P.S. The last line was -classic-
| The Mad Empty Shell chapter 2 . 11/9/2007
This is FANTASTIC! I just love the way you portrayed Roxas... It's so original and realistic. You also got hold of Hayner's original character - that's great.
Please update asap!
| Cheministic chapter 1 . 11/9/2007
I have to be honest. I was a bit wary going into this one after Water. (Especially after I saw angst in the genre.) I don’t have much to say at this point, though, except that I like what I’ve seen so far, and I’m pretty confident that it will be a good read. I’m looking forward to reading the next chapter.
| 13loves8loves9loves6 chapter 2 . 11/9/2007
hahahah aw dude..this story kiinda reminds me...Land before time hahhaha um number VII i think...Stone of cold fire hahahah " Roxas ish like littlegoot and Axel ish like the rainbow faces
| Orchid Butterflies chapter 2 . 11/9/2007
Wonderful chapter, as usual
Not much else to say. Sleep deprivation has turned my mind to mush. So, I'll go with I can't wait until the next chapter!
| Orchid Butterflies chapter 1 . 11/9/2007
I like this story already! XD
Not much to say about this chapter, except maybe that it's a good start.
As usual, can't wait until the next chapter