|Reviews for TongueTied|
| Ciella chapter 1 . 11/25/2009
As much as I have trouble enjoying SonicxSally pairs, your narrative is very good. But be careful on two points:
- Your dialogue is canon, but so much so that the characters are a little flat. Expand on them!
- This is a pretty short chapter, and not one packed with action or description, either. The first chapter is one of the most important! Make the most of a first impression.
Best of luck, anyhow.
| Miss Inadequate chapter 1 . 11/16/2007
Your story just reminded me why I used to write this stuff.
The brevity of language is so luring and the quality of even just this brief scene is enticing. You bring their characters to life through description and dialogue, and you do it in a way that stimulates the reader and doesn't become wordy. It's a shame that kind of writing isn't a more frequent sight here.
Kudos to the piece overall and thanks for putting this up. You have talent. )
| Ted chapter 1 . 11/10/2007
A little wierd, maybe, but cute. :)