|Reviews for Lolita in Love|
| Guest chapter 16 . 12/20/2014
It's sad that you won't update, this is really good. Although I'm not supportive of this kind of relationship in real life, it's a guilty pleasure in fiction.
Sasuke screwed up royally by platonically cheating and neglecting Hinata and frankly I don't see why she should take him back, regardless of how much he repents (which adds up to nothing so far - beating up Kakashi does more for his own caveman ego than it does for Hina). Yes, Karin's a manipulative bitch, but he didn't have to play into her trap - he had a choice and he made it. Clearly at some point he valued spending time with Karin more than his own girlfriend. To be honest I can't stand it when some reviewers put all the blame on Karin and make excuses for Sasuke - it's like those people, who think men can't control their own sexuality.
Kakashi's proven to be the better man so far with the glaring exception of when he used Hinata as a fuckdoll after his fight with Sasuke. What I do hope is that he's serious about this. Knowing that Hinata is so young, emotionally fragile and has many experiences of neglect and abandonment, he should really have been more careful and sorted out his own feelings before engaging her in a undefined relationship. If he breaks her heart now, I'm afraid I'll never be able to consider him decent for Hina again, and poor Hina might end up suicidal.
Your English is good enough, but could use some brushing up and more thorough proofreading, a beta might help you.
As for the lemons, I see nothing wrong with smut and you write it well. I would advice, though, that you try and balance it out with romantic or everyday scenes (like the trip to Kakashi's hometown) - that way it won't make it seem like their whole relationship is based just on physical attraction, unless that's the way you want to go (in that case I'm afraid Hinata's in for some heartbreak).
Might I also suggest that you give a link to Hinata's outfits (unless they're your own creations) - I'd love to see what they actually look like.
The last chapter was a bit of a filler (but lovely nonetheless), so I'm not sure yet where we're heading plotwise. As I see it you have three ways this story could go: the couple facing opposition from society, Sasuke and Hinata's family (Hiashi would clearly favor Sasuke), Kakashi breaking Hinata's heart because he's afraid of commitment/judgement/love (I really would hate that direction, as I stated above) or a mixture of both. Who knows, you migh surprise us and she ends up with Guy ;)
I hope you can "get your groove back" and finish this - the world needs more KakaHina.
| anonnie chapter 16 . 4/27/2014
I'm a little late to the party I know. I read it all in one sitting.
But this was so good and hawt. First time reading this pairing too. Kakashi, very noice.
Sasu my naive innocent baby! (I see in your profile you have sasuhina, hmmm. Oh yes!)
Is it too late to ask for updates? Please?
| ecy chapter 16 . 3/29/2013
i hope you continue this story
| HoshiNoTsuya chapter 16 . 3/3/2013
I like it! I love KakaHina... dangerously xD They look so perfect together! And the idea of a sexy photographer with a way too cute lolita is really appealing! I love the way you've developed their relationship :D
It's not confusing at all, don't worry.
And OMG! the ending of this last chapter was really strong... just the image of them being photographed in such an intimate moment... oh, God.
I want to believe you're still writing about them.
I'll be waiting for that update :)
Take care and good luck!
| Seraphina Dragon chapter 16 . 12/18/2012
hope to read more
| Death by Me chapter 16 . 9/20/2012
omg it ended right there. ughhh . i was really enjoying the story . sad face. UPDATE !
| Ayako-7 chapter 16 . 4/17/2012
love your story so far!
| sheerionator chapter 11 . 12/18/2011
AhhhhmaaaaazzzziiinG. those are tears of joy keep up the hard work thumbs up
| HinawithLove chapter 16 . 8/15/2011
I love this story too!
| Altarian-Princess chapter 16 . 8/9/2011
That was so graphic!
I'm really starting to like the KakaHina pairing now.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
I wonder how this story will turn out...
| Haruka2007 chapter 16 . 8/9/2011
| CharNinja LOL chapter 16 . 8/8/2011
Can't wait till you update
| xXxItaHinaSasuXxX chapter 16 . 8/8/2011
I loved the chapter!
Pity it was so short after such a looong wait. I enjoyed it though and can't wait for the next update.
| the real honey senpai chapter 16 . 8/8/2011
waw this story is really good :D 'wait for you to update next
| shugosailormewmewz21 chapter 16 . 8/7/2011
Freakin' love you man! You and your awesome smut.