|Reviews for Shinji and Warhammer40k|
| Clone chapter 52 . 9/4
Dear Charles Bhepin,
I love this story, truly. So I have to ask. Can you Please Update this Masterpiece of Fanfiction? it has been 3 Years since a posting has be made. I don't know why you have not, but please do.
| Cosmos2001 chapter 46 . 7/21
You are a horrible human being for not putting warnings at the start of story. Major character death is not something you just expect people to...expect. 'It's just what Ayanami does'? Well Nagisa clearly didn't die as he was supposed to. I haven't watched NGE because I don't like to be depressed, I thought this was a fix-fic, it doesn't seem like it.
Half of the story flew over my head, every chapter made me want to drop it, but I read it anyway because I thought the end would be something grand. I'm just gonna skip-read the rest of chapters, just to see what's at the end.
| Ark Zilong chapter 3 . 6/27
"I'm not amuro rei" unfortunately I have to be a MASSIVE nerd and point out that Amuro did horrible his first time piloting, only surviving through it thanks to the gundam being though enough to handle a beating, and having the manual handy helped.
This review is mostly a joke btw, but yeah, people gve amuro way too much credit for doing well in his first sortie when it was 90% the gundam and dumb luck carrying him
| Mantha065 chapter 40 . 5/31
This is where I gave up. This story unfortunately has devolved into near-nonsense, having very little to do with Warhammer 40k anymore, and instead becoming some convoluted Evangelion fever dream.
I spent an hour skimming the chapters after this, and it's clear the story does not get better. It gets even more nonsensical. In my skimming I saw magic hair, Nazi zombies, time travel, more jedi-monks, more lapses in characters' personalities, Kaworu becoming obsessed with defeating Shinji, multiple active Rei clones, Lilith being released, and a steadily-increasing flood of random pop-culture references, many of which are shoe-horned in, and just end up being distracting and annoying.
I'm sad to say it, but this story has indeed irreparably gone off the rails, jumped the shark, and collapsed in on itself. Everything past the chapters detailing Sahaquiel's attack is a totally different story from what was being built-up and devolves into nonsense.
It's a real shame.
| Mantha065 chapter 36 . 5/30
I don't understand what the implications were when Yang revealed that China is ready for another Impact. Everyone treated it as some horrible thing, but I don't get it.
And if the part where Shinji attempts-and-fails to telepathically hit Kaworu in a recorded video 8 hours into the past was supposed to be played for comedy, I couldn't tell. If it was supposed to be a comedic thing, that would explain the nonsensical nature of it. If it was serious...how on Earth does one telepathically punch (or miss, in this case) someone *in a recording* AND in the past? That's just Monty Python levels of nonsense, which is why I can't tell if it's supposed to be serious or comedy.
| Mantha065 chapter 35 . 5/28
It's as I feared in my last review. The plot is becoming more confusing.
I do not remotely understand the conversation between Liliel, the various interjecting voices, and Shinji. Nor do I understand why the Inner Space had a giant building made of one continuous piece. Nor do I understand what the golden light bursting from Liliel's shadow was about, once the Marines had been thrown back into the real world. Nor do I understand if Akagi's comment about Asuka ripping through space and time was supposed to be taken literally or not, I have no idea what Asuka did. Finally, I don't understand how Shinji was able to burst out of Liliel, was it supposed to be implied that he consumed the Angel's soul or something?
I'll say it again: I REALLY enjoy this story, and I hope it gets better, but when the plot becomes incoherent and incomprehensible, it's hard to have faith that the overall quality will survive by the end.
| Mantha065 chapter 32 . 5/28
I'm 2/3 of the way through this chapter. Specifically, I just finished the meeting with Kensuke, Yang, Shinji, and the Colonel.
I was surprised it took this long for a fanfic of such magnitude to get confusing, but unfortunately, I'm at that point nonetheless. I do not remotely understand the vague descriptions of Shinji wandering Earth and discovering Wraithbone in the ruins of ancient Egypt, then discovering (in a way that begs for clarification) superconductors. Why is there Wraithbone on Earth? Who is this thousand-year-old (Eldar?) woman he met? What are the mind-worms, if they weren't made by Kaworu/Iruel and are instead ancient things that were given to prehistoric warriors? What is all this about an enclave called Jaaval of ancient psychic monks who had the power to resurrect their kin? How was Shinji able to accomplish SO MUCH in the span of a few months? Hasn't Shinji's exploits long since surpassed the budget given to him by the MAGI, anyway?
I fiercely admire this story, especially with how well it's held up until now, but my experience with reading stories is telling me that I've hit the point of the story where the plot buckles under its own weight and ceases to make continuing sense. I certainly hope the vagueries are explained and questions are answered, and I'm going to eagerly read this story to its end...but this chapter has been a confusing mess for me. What the hell is going on.
| Mantha065 chapter 19 . 5/24
I've been holding off on a review, if only so I could wait until I've read it all, but god damn do I desperately wish for fan art of the cast, with each in their unique garb. ...Especially Biker-Sister Maya.
| Guest chapter 52 . 5/20
In case anyone's planning on giving this story a shot, no, the prose and dialogue does not get better. Find something that actually is profound rather than something that merely provides the appearance of profundity; find something that actually is competently written rather than something which confuses obfuscation with subtlety.
| TheCyanNinja chapter 1 . 4/10
No idea what I just read, but it was cool. Also, I need to read Nietzche and Kant real quick.
| Tyfli barda chapter 1 . 3/22
This story is a fk mess, I really wanted to like it not only because it is a long story and an interesting premise in the crossover and the language and grammar is decent enough. But the format, crazy dialogues and confusing storyline is a fk mess, in which you can't even understand the concept of linear thought process and plot without a Rosetta stone. Ranting, discombobulated fantasies and more ranting. I have never read a fanfiction or tried to at least this messy and I have read lots of fanfiction. This actually gave me a headache trying to puzzle it out. Good look with your future writing but I'm out, and try to give the readers the common courtesy to at least space your dialogues to some semblance of sanity
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 1/7
This fanfic has been a true journey. I remember first reading it around 2011, as I graduated high school and entered college. This fanfic articulated humanism to me in a way that helped me break free of my right-wing young-earth-creationist evangelical-fundamentalist upbringing. Since then, my views have grown more nuanced than the humanism I initially learned from maniacs with chainsaw-swords, but this fic will always hold a special place in my heart. It was rough seeing the updates only slowly trickle over the last decade, but it was worth it and we are near the end!
About this chapter more specifically, it was fun seeing the remix of the original ending. And you are right, the American military rarely gets slapped around. Thanks to Pentagon grants to movies and TV shows (transformers and stargate both come to mind off the top of my head), it seems like many fictional portrayals of the US military suck up to it a lot. And hopefully for the American audience seeing US soldiers get beaten down by the Children will make them better realize the tragedy of human vs human conflict at the End of Evangelion.
| WildFreedom chapter 1 . 10/23/2021
Is this gonna be one of those absolutely stupid stories where the butterfly effect doesn't exist? There's something called creativity, I hope you end up using a bit of it.
| Daggerxxx chapter 4 . 10/11/2021
And what's the difference? Everything is the same as in the canon. Jesus, even Touji's sister got hurt again.
| Locating chapter 16 . 9/16/2021
Da boyz believe that Shinji is da biggest, da strongest, and capable of krumpin' anifing that crosses his path, so he is!