Oh My God! I loved it! The last stanza was perfect for it, it went together so well!

Dang! This is really sad! Great job! :)

extra !

hehehe funny and insane just like hichi -

personally, i find the humpty dumpty line takes away from your peom. mostly because the two hate eachother right? so why would the horse -want- to put ichigo back together? just a little something to consider. again, we don't know their relationship so it's hard to really give an opinion. but i liked it, and that's all that matters right?

I like the feel of it. Keep it up!

that was i dont know...breathtaking? no i have no clue. but i loved it.

Wow..That was amazing...This is definitely going on my favorites list! Keep on writing!

Ja ne,

Gohan'sUltimatePower