|Reviews for The Girl Who Makes Me Smile|
| sk8tergirl-sakura chapter 1 . 6/10/2008
| Headphone Hero chapter 1 . 4/5/2008
Very well written!I love write more! _
| sarasunnyshine chapter 1 . 2/11/2008
This made me laugh at how amazing he is and smile sweetly at how cute his love for her is!
| TheUnrealInsomniac chapter 1 . 2/2/2008
So did you misplace your meds then lol?
Nice little angsty romance.
And i don't like the SakuNaruHina, personally can't stand Hinata but alas i was just making a statement lol
TUI (Or Dave wtev you wanna call me)
| PotoPerson chapter 1 . 11/19/2007
Ok, so I was poking around the internet, then somehow I made it to your profile page, then I made it to this fic and thus a reveiw is born!
So what to say...well...mabye the fact that this was flippin AWESOME! Who knew Naruto was such a poeticish kind of guy? I mean, "Happy. To me, ‘happy’ can mean a lot of things. It means a hot, delicious ramen on a cold winter’s day." I love that line!
You know, it would be kind of cool if you somehow work this into Troublesome High. Not saying you have to just saying its a suggestion.
| takukijiri katoto chapter 1 . 11/18/2007
THIS STORY WAS SO SAD... I CAN TOTALLY RELATE. GREAT JOB
| Garfield94 chapter 1 . 11/18/2007
Awsome chapter lex!I like your discriptive in many of your stories.I can't wait for others in the stories and I will do my ,rave,and Naruto said,Peace.
| Tori Kay chapter 1 . 11/14/2007
Nice one, Lex!
I really like how you italized some of the words for emphasis which also made them stand out even more.
WARNING: No more gush and praise beyond this point.
"To me, ‘happy’ can mean a lot of things."
First off, the sentence seems kind of awkward. My I suggest rephrasing it to be "To me, what can make me 'happy' comes in various forms." and then change the proceeding "It means..." into "It can come as..."
"Some fathead who used to be my best friend."
"Some fathead..." can be changed to "The same fathead..." and you'll add some more rhyming to the rhyming you already have at the end.
"Besides, even after rejection, I’ll follow her around."
'Still' needs to be added because that statement makes him seem like a potential stalker.
"Someone taller, handsome-r, smarter guy will probably sweep her off her feet."
Okay, I don’t know if it was intentional or not but ‘handsome-r’ isn’t correct. It’s ‘more handsome’.
“Look on the sliver lining though. He won’t be funny.”
The first sentence should be changed to “There’s a silver lining though;” and then combine it with the sentence following it.
The hyphens aren’t necessary.I guess that’s enough nit-picking.:)Keep up the good work!
- Tori Kay
| selandora chapter 1 . 11/14/2007
my god, that was so cute and believable! it's really good how you manage to keep his thoughts from becoming too depressing by throwing something funny in, just in the nick of time. you still manage to get the message across though. good job!
| epicinsanity101 chapter 1 . 11/14/2007
That's so sweet! I like how it's formatted too. Is Naruto like writing it down? Anyway, this is a great fic! I luv it!