|Reviews for Pity The Child|
| Sabaku no Sable chapter 1 . 5/21/2009
i liked it. did jareth kill the near rapist? sounded like he did. YAY if he did.
| Asrayu chapter 1 . 1/13/2008
Chess Labyrinth...what more could a girl want :) Nice work!
| Ripper101 chapter 1 . 11/21/2007
You know, I really liked this one.
Your writing could do with a bit of editing and re-structuring, but this is such a uniquely clear way of looking at what is, in essence, a really simple story.
It was a bit monochrome at the start. Every one of these types of stories have Toby as 'unable to fit in' and I do think you can dispense with his propensity to enact the play in the park the way Sarah does in the film. It doesn't seem to serve any purpose.
But once I actually read on, it just sucked me right in. And that last paragraph was a spectacular twist in the tale. Very pretty, indeed.
So congratulations. This is a really satisfying read.