This is very lovely. I adored the John/Teyla scenes and chemistry and the concept is genius. Plus war games planned by SheppardAWESOME.

The beginning was so sweet! :D And the ending too really :D

Can't wait to see what you do with CP.

Maybe we could do more chaps? PM me if you want me to write chapter 3 - and then you could do 4 or something? :D:D

Aww a date! :D So sweet! :D

Ohh... didn't see that one coming! :D

Very cute! Love this beginning :D

*off to read the next chap!*

YAY! I like, way much! The ending was great! YAY YAY YAY!

*beams*

:) I LOVE it!

Keep up the good work! And if you intend to continue with this story, please do! And update soon!

m, john, teyla, and a hot tub- that sounds like a great night. lovin this so far

Overall, the pacing on this was WAY fast. Time frame was what? Ten minutes? Read like it. If you can go back, and adjust the pacing using breaks and a bit more exposition, it would make this much better.

Also: Sheppard is flitting about. Shep doesn't flit. Nor does Dr. Keller do PDA on duty. Or Ronon for that fact. These are little things that detract from the story being the best that it can be. It has so much potential, I think you can do better.

Another good update. Thanks :D

hehe haha hohoh! FUNNY keep it up! (I can see somebody, not just John, with paint in their hair now for some reason!)

Lovin' it! keep it up!

Oh. It's getting interesting.

VERY CUTE, I JUST LOVE JOHN'S APOLOGY TO TEYLA VERY FUNNY AND WHY THE HELL WHOULD HE NOT WANT HER TO FIGHT BY HIS SIDE.

Paintball fight! Can't wait!

LOL. It sounds like fun. I can't wait to see more. Great job. :D:D