|Reviews for King of Shadows, Queen of Light|
| TanithAeyrs chapter 58 . 3/2/2013
You have done an exceptional job in developing your characters and telling their story within the NWN2 OC. I rarely read OC stories as I prefer more original story lines, but your retelling of the OC plot line is refreshing and unique. I love the way you have handled your paladins and I hope you continue this tale when you have time.
| Druid Moon chapter 58 . 12/25/2012
Oh my gosh- I think you've made me fall in love with Casavir completely with this. He's so much more... tangible, so real, compared to other stories and to the game- it's honestly amazing.
| MorwennaTheWicked chapter 58 . 11/2/2012
I love seeing this side of Sand. He's part uncle and part adviser. Actually, I could see Daeghun making Casavir kill and dress some game, but re-roofing the house works too.
I always thought this was one of the hardest conversations in the game, especially if the Knight Captain was at all close to the Starlings. Well done.
| onion chapter 58 . 11/1/2012
I was on here during my lunch break at work and nearly peed myself when I saw you had updated! Poor Bevil and Retta. ;_;
| Anesor chapter 58 . 10/31/2012
Wow, what a festering wreck, poor Bevil. And just before she could witness Cas doing chores.
| onion chapter 57 . 10/6/2012
Holy cow, I really do enjoy your writing. You haven't put hiatus or dead in the summary, so I'm assuming you're just waiting for real life to give you a break for once. I hope you update soon! You take a very leisurely pace with romance and plot, which is a nice change from the rest of fanfiction. Most other stories put gore and sex at the top of the priority list as opposed to character and relationship development, so this fic has been very refreshing and moreover relate-able. Even though Bishop rarely appears, I admire how you've portrayed him. I think you've done more to capture his nature with the occasional cameo than most authors do in fics that are centered entirely around him. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but as Arrighan and Casavir's relationship progresses, I've noticed a more secular tone in Arrighan's thoughts. Though religion is still central to her development and strongly present throughout your chapters, the focus on devotions, prayer and vigil is somewhat less frequent/detailed as her priorities shift to accommodate her feelings for Casavir. The struggle for chastity she and Casavir endure is quite intriguing as well.
Well, like I said, I hope you update! I'm looking forward to the interaction between Casavir and Daeghun. :D Fantastic job!
| onion chapter 1 . 10/2/2012
You could have fooled me. If you had not said you were a non-native speaker, I never would have guessed. I hope someday I'll learn the languages I'm studying as you have! Excellent writing!
| Jack Milo chapter 57 . 8/9/2011
Must say I've spent the last few day's thoroughly chewing this story. And I swallowed very easily. For someone who's native language isn't English your grammar is much better then most of the people I graduated with. A few spelling errors here and there but that happens to everybody. I love the direction you've taken the Nwn2 story. I am curious as to how, if at all, you plan on dealing with the expansions and can't wait for that. On a final note I think you've written an excellent story so far with a very good writing style. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
| jeandark chapter 57 . 4/8/2011
Rhia, my wonderful friend:) thank You for making my day so much better :* i love this story and i'm so happy that You don't drop it permanently ) it will be pure pleasure to read MORE :)
About Jackaroo.. my first thought: WTF? i tried to read her comments.. and then to figure out what she really want to achieve with such words.. and stil i don't know what it could be..
The conclusion is simple my dear Rhia, forget about this strange person :) and i think that she deserve none of Your precious time. Please don't let her make You sad.. *bighuge* till the next chapi:) KISSES :3
| MorwennaTheWicked chapter 1 . 3/26/2011
Rhia, I think your disclaimer says it all. English is not your native language, and grammar and punctuation differs even among other English-speaking countries.
I feel I must point out to your latest ardent reviewer that English should capitalized, as it is either a proper noun, or a proper adjective. People who live in glass houses...
Furthermore, plagiarism is a very serious charge that must be backed up with proof, not vague insinuations.
In addition, I would also like to say, put up or shut up. Let's see you do your own take on the story, missy.
| Jackaroo chapter 48 . 3/24/2011
Chess game. Nice allegory.
| Rhia474 chapter 43 . 3/24/2011
To: Jackaroo. I decided to leave this public, rather than PM in, given the topic.
I am trying to take your revies as you most likely intend them-helpful criticism. But accusing me of plagiarism and making snide comments about my education hardly falls into this category. I'd appreciate if you either explained what you mean plainly, or if in the future would contact me in a PM if you feel that there's a need for insinuating I am copying something.
| Jackaroo chapter 44 . 3/24/2011
Last I checked, the Orangerie was a rather lovely palace set in some even more lovely gardens in Kassel, Germany.
The more you know, eh?
And yes, I'm trying to ignore the previous chapter. Sorry.
| Jackaroo chapter 43 . 3/24/2011
I have no words for the aggravation that this chapter presented me, except for a quiet reminder:
I am quite sure you have enough of a tertiary education to understand the difference between referencing and plagiarism. I believe that while there is some truly spectacular rubbish in the realm of fanfiction, and a lot of it, the decent authors should not consider themselves above, or rather below, adhering to certain rules of writing - it doesn't just apply to assignments and journalism.
Honestly, your work has me swinging between giggling madly and being affected by the emotional parts, to almost banging my head against the keyboard at silly rookie mistakes, which I think you should be past.
I don't want to offend you. I never give a critical review without at least trying to help.
I hope this helps. I hope at some point you return to this story of yours and do an in-depth edit with the help of a competent Beta. I truly hope it does not get left behind, as parts of this story are true gold.
| Jackaroo chapter 32 . 3/24/2011
"If this is some kind of a secret code amongst paladins, I am just letting you two know right now that it can be horribly misleading."
I had to stop reading, scroll down and comment on this before I keep reading.
It's fairly late here, and the pure force of effort it took for me NOT to burst out laughing and possibly laugh myself right out of my chair at this line caused instant tears to leak out my eyes. However intense, moving or dark the rest of the chapter is, you'll forgive me if I giggle my way through it.
Love Shandra. Almost always gets the best lines.