|Reviews for Red Line|
| Tosa chapter 1 . 10/3/2008
WHY ONLY ONE REVIEW? THIS WAS FUCKING INCREDIBLE.
Your imagery, your metaphors! God, I loved the metaphors! This was so... interesting! I love this fic. I seriously love this fic.
| Vrazvir chapter 1 . 12/16/2007
This is an interesting sentence
"He latched on rigor-mortis-and-bone at Musashi’s wrist."
but I'm not sure what you're trying to say.
Are you trying to say his muscles were as stiff as in rigor mortis?
Also there's something weird going on with the commas here:
"He had to let him see the way they bled, the way this was different, but in plain view of every person in the station, Hiruma turned his head and sunk his gleaming white teeth into Musashi’s exposed wrist, his own kind of reply."
Otherwise, I think that I liked parts of it.