|Reviews for A Beautiful Fear|
| Arpad Hrunta chapter 3 . 8/14/2012
Good story! Janice is an interesting character, and I like her relationship with Neville, and how Neville slowly changes over the short course of knowing her.
I see you've written more of her, so I'll have to check those stories out.
| Fallen.Angel.Rinjii chapter 3 . 4/9/2011
wow, this was really good! i love it! usually, i don't like it when people change the personalities of the original character, but this change was definitely for the better! keep it up!
| AmmyChey3X chapter 3 . 11/7/2010
Awesome FanFic! DDDD
Janice is an Awesome OC!
| Chellendora chapter 3 . 8/14/2010
I would not get along very well with Janice Pettibone is she wore that 'If it's not metal, it's crap' shirt in front of me! But that just goes to show that you've got a realistic character there. I could easily see the depth to her, and she was a good character foil for Neville (I like to call them "catalyst characters"). Reading your descriptions of Neville's reactions were wonderful; he was so in character! I hope that you do explore their relationship again one day.
| callmedaynuhh chapter 3 . 6/15/2010
you were right, i definitely did like this.
after the twins neville was my favorite33333
| Caighlee chapter 3 . 6/3/2010
I like this story! There aren't many Neville Longbottom fanfictions out there and i absolutely ADORE him! Thanks for writing this!
| The Mary Sue Hunter chapter 1 . 11/19/2009
Please do the world of fanfiction a favor and make Janice seem a little less Sue-ish. It's not as bad as "My Immortal", but it needs work :)
| drummerxbaby chapter 3 . 10/6/2008
aww that was so good!
thanks for tellin me about it!
| ReviewsGalore chapter 3 . 3/27/2008
Story: 7.75/10. A fic about a female OC who introduces Neville to the wonders of metal music just seems like a recipe for disaster, but you manage to pull it off fairly well. I think that the length of the fic is perfect. Not too long, not too short.
Characters: 7/10. Janice is somewhat interesting, but I also think that she is vaguely Sueish. Neville is in character, but I think that part of the problem is that there isn't enough give and take in their relationship. Janice tells Neville how he should think, how he should act and she always seems to be right, but Neville doesn't seem to have a whole lot to offer her. The thing about him being sweet felt like it was tacked on at the end to justify the relationship.
Creativity: 7.75/10. The basic idea of this fic has been done poorly a million times, though not usually with Neville. Something about the execution just feels very original, though.
Writing: 8.75/10. Your writing is really excellent. You are good with both dialogue and description.
Believability: 8/10. You never totally convince me that these two should be together, but you give it a surprisingly good effort.
Overall: 7.75/10. This fic is very well written and well executed in general, but the pairing doesn't quite jive with me.
Professionalism: A. Your notes and summary are both nice.
| cto10121 chapter 3 . 3/23/2008
You were right; I do enjoy this story. Janice seems...well, different, but extremely likable. I rather like her. Hope you update soon!
| TheTinyestOne chapter 3 . 1/11/2008
I like this, thank you for letting me know it was here, its very well written and I actaully find it quite believable keep up the good work.
| Vega Black62 chapter 3 . 1/3/2008
Fun story. I liked that Janice introduces Neville to some Muggle Heavy Music. Very appropriate. I think it's great to broaden Neville's a world a bit with a muggle born character. You have a good hand with diologue.
I would like to see more give and take in the relationship with Neville - more complexity. Does she ever learn anything from him? He isn't stupid. He understands suffering, compassion and loyalty quite well. He knows peoples actions have consequences that can hurt others. He can see thestrals and understands death. He knows alot of things his peers may not know. At this stage in the relationship Janice appears to know everything and Neville nothing.
I liked the this isn't a game conversation. I think that was insightfull of you. That is how Neville would think of her behavior. But did Janice learn anything from it? Does she think its a game? Should her thinking change? The country is at war does she know it? Has her opinions changed or broadened? Does her behavior change? Answering these questions could give Neville's and Janice's relationship more complexity.
What does flirt with darkness mean? What would it mean to Neville? Does he think she might be tempted to do something really bad like the people who tortured his parents? What does he think of that?
It would be great if we could see more interaction of Neville and especially Janice with more characters.
| contour chapter 3 . 12/31/2007
SQUE! *fangirl squeel* THAT WAS ADORABLE! XD I would DEFINITLY read another story with Neville and Janice! Thanks again for inviting me to read your stories!
| contour chapter 2 . 12/31/2007
T_T Poor Neville! I'm glad he has someone to help him through those times. He really needs someone like Janice.
| contour chapter 1 . 12/31/2007
Deadgum...Janice said...HOLY POO!
What an awesome story! The character is really cool. And the other characters are so spot on. Thank you very much for inviting me to read this! I can't wait to read the next chapter!