Reviews for The Sniper |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent storytelling and pacing, it left me wanting more, but isn't that what we always want? Thanks for sharing your time and talent! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice take, pleasant story. Although I must protest against weasel/Hr pairing. |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I think I've read this one before. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was really enjoyable. (Full disclose: I dislike RonHr Harryfan girl stories, and but .. by skipping all of the Ron as an asshole scenes and motivations to be an ass, without changing his character, while removing all the 100 instances Harry could have used someone (starting with 3rd year really) but fingirl was too busy being an air headed fan girl, this did not in any way hamper my enjoyment of this story) Anyway! Thanks for writing |
![]() ![]() steps to ruin a story: 1- make the story in first person 2- bad spelling 3- mix first person with second or third person 4- do not give context 5- not teaching correctly where each thing begins (dialogues, thoughts among others) This story is ruined by steps 1, 3 and 5. not even 5 paragraphs and I already consider this story a waste of time and a headache generator. I RECOMMEND NOT READING IT |
![]() ![]() Fucking amazing! And I'm happy that Harry use cedric names!, That legit made me teared up! And not gonna lie gun are much useful that wands seeing their are much faster than spells! OH how much I love this soldier Harry and what's more! I hope he returns as a corporal I love him find some sense of home in the military like some veterans would do |
![]() ![]() ![]() Read it again. Still great. Love the fun epilogue. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So good Especially exposing Malfoy |
![]() ![]() ![]() My first criticism is more of a nitpick, that particular rifle uses a detachable box magazine, not a clip. I thought your forearms terminology was great and then I read about him referring to a mag as a clip I wanted to facepalm. Also with regards to the first scene, what you described is more akin to an active shooter situation than a conventional sniper. A sniper usually takes a single shot and then relocates to a new location, they don't usually dump two mags from the same spot in such a short period of time for risk of being discovered. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this thanks |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very nice fic! |
![]() ![]() My word good sir I know next to nothing about the Potterverse, but that was a thrilling read through and through. Of course I'm waving off the willy nilly use of live ammo, but that's a minor thing at best. I'm sure the magic world has ways of cloning muggle goods, ammo included. And that Gibbons naming Cedric Potter, icing on the cake. Thank you for a great read! |
![]() ![]() ![]() It was entertaining. I went through boot camp 51 years ago. No need for more details. Well done. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great! |